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Title: Chapter 12 16 Feb 2014 9:44 pm
Reviewer: Anne (Anonymous) [Report This]
    This scene is so sweet in its simplicity; yet so full of unspoken emotion. i love it. it made me tear up, just a little. Wonderful, evocative writing:

    He blinked several times and swallowed before looking up at Severus, meeting his eyes for the first time in days.

    "Thank you."

    Severus had had doubts about returning the cloak...in the past, he had highly disapproved of the way Harry had used it to sneak about, and he had fully intended to lecture and warn the boy about using it wisely. But somehow, looking down into Harry's shining eyes, he couldn't bring himself to ruin the moment. He could save the lecture for later, he supposed.

    Instead he replied softly, "You're welcome."

    Author's Response: Oh, thank you!  It's nice to have a new reader again.
Title: Chapter 12 15 Dec 2010 7:22 am
Reviewer: MoiraRClip (Signed) [Report This]
    Yay! I'm so happy that Snape is trying to make amends.

    Author's Response: Thanks for all the nice reviews!  I'm happy you're enjoying the story!
Title: Chapter 12 23 Dec 2009 8:03 pm
Reviewer: Victory-Starr (Signed) [Report This]
    Awwwww, he gave him the cloak and broom back and didn't even lecture him! ::hugs Sev plushie::

    Love this story! Why'd I wait so long to read it??? ;-)

    Author's Response: Yeah, Sev's getting soft, isn't he, lol?  I'm happy you're enjoying it. 
Title: Chapter 12 23 Dec 2008 6:49 pm
Reviewer: RaevynMoon (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I'm at ff.net. i like parts of your story, i just don't like the fact that harry's a slave. if i were to write something that starts out similar but without the whole slavery issue - would you be offended? i'm at (w/out spaces) the lost titan @ gmail. com

    Author's Response: No, I wouldn't be offended, you know, so long as you don't copy word for word, of course.  Truthfully, there are very few, if any, completely original ideas.  Many stories have similar themes. 
Title: Chapter 12 30 May 2008 7:12 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    Snape is making things up to Harry, I'm so proud of him, lol. The line about how Hary did not want Sirius's money, he wanted Sirius made me smile. I bet I look like a werido reading your story and laughing, smiling at my computer screen. Only one more chapteer to go before I am caught up, :( BOO!
    So I'll say this now, update ASAP, PLEASE? Great story, I really enjoyed reading whay you have writeen so far.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  Severus is really trying.  I'm glad you're enjoying it!
Title: Chapter 12 26 May 2008 12:22 pm
Reviewer: Elfwyn (Anonymous) [Report This]
    The story is interesting and the character development is excellent, although I would like to see Harry really speak his mind. Those so called adults around him deserve it. As for the concept of the slave spell I suppose one must suspend belief for the plot; otherwise you would have wizards like Voldemort taking over the world with this spell very easily, those that disobeyed would killing off themselves, and stealing all their property and money would be a breeze. Malfoy as the owner of this book would have used it alot. Other than that weak point you do have a good story as far as Snape and Harry having to get to know one another.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I do really love developing the characters.  There are some weak points about the slavery spell, as you said.  I do have explanations that will come up in the story later, but I don't know if they're very good explanations, lol.  But I just have to try my best.  Thanks again!
Title: Chapter 12 21 May 2008 11:27 pm
Reviewer: Anne T. Squires (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Yay! You updated! And what a wonderful update it is!

    I was so glad to see Snape trying with Harry. He is obviously very sincere about wanting to build a positive relationship with Harry. I think you have done a wonderful job of portraying just how awkward Snape and Harry would feel around each other. You have conveyed that extremely well. You know, a lot can be shown to a reader in awkward silences, more so than in long, drawn out dialogue. Besides, it makes complete sense that both would be rather circumspect around the other. I know Snape wants to get to know Harry. Yet, that is not something that can be rushed.

    I find that I'm glad that you are not rushing to any sort of reconciliation. a That would be too forced, too unrealistic. That is generally one of my biggest problems with "Snape mentors Harry" stories. I can not stand it when they quickly "forgive and forget." These two have a past that cannot be ignored. I'm glad you are not falling into that trap of rushing to the warm fuzzies. Getting there is where most of the fun is anyway.

    Thoroughly enjoying your fic.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you so much!  I'm really happy you continue to enjoy my little story!  Severus really is trying, but as you said, there's just too much past animosity for Harry to be able to trust him right away.  I really am anxious to get to the parts where they can share warm fuzzies (I love warm fuzzies; just take a look at all my other fics, lol), but I'm trying not to rush it too much. 

    And yes, they are both very awkward around one another right now.  Severus doesn't know how to make things better, and if feeling very out of his depth, while Harry is afraid and really can't imagine why Snape would want to change, though he is about to begin wondering about it all.  But warm fuzzies are definitely coming in the future!  Thanks again! 

Title: Chapter 12 21 May 2008 9:20 pm
Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous) [Report This]
    What a nice turnaround.

    Author's Response: Thank you!
Title: Chapter 12 21 May 2008 1:28 am
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WONDERFUL!! FANTASTIC!!!!!!!!!!! THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU FOR UPDATEING!!!!!! I REALLY LIKE THIS STORY!!!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE AGAIN SOON!!!!!!!
    P.S HAVE LOTS AND LOTS OF CHOCOLATE FROGS FOR ALL YOUR HARD WORK!!!!!!

    Author's Response: Thank you, both for the review and the chocolate frogs!  I'll try to update again soon! 
Title: Chapter 12 20 May 2008 11:07 pm
Reviewer: Potterworm (Signed) [Report This]
    Another great chapter.

    Author's Response: Thank you!

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