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Title: Chapter 13 02 Jun 2008 5:47 am
Reviewer: KimSpiritTalks (Signed) [Report This]
    Excellent chapter, like the others. I love your Snape and how he relates to Harry. I love how satisfied he was to see Harry happy. And you did the flying scene very well!

    Author's Response: Thank you, Kim!  I couldn't do this without you and Kaity and Ivanova!  I'm glad you like Severus; I enjoy writing him and Harry, and I'm so looking forward to the future, when Severus is really trying to make Harry happy.
Title: Chapter 13 30 May 2008 7:21 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    There is going to be a sequel? Yippee! Please update when ever possible, I can't wait for more! Severus is being so great right now, it makes me feel all happy, lol. And I REALLY want to hug Harrym the poor dear. Severus needs to hug Harry, (hint hint), lol.

    Author's Response: Thank you so much, Scorpia!  Harry does need a hug, for sure.  I don't know that Severus is ready for it yet, but Harry will get his share of hugs in the future, how about that?
Title: Chapter 13 30 May 2008 4:36 am
Reviewer: Snapesthe1 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I think the formality around Snape is natural given Harry's current depression and fear. He doesn't really trust Snape and he doesn't see any hope for a future. He's living for his death.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  "He's living for his death."---that expresses it perfectly!  It's the lack of hope for the future that has made Harry fixate on being with Sirius and his parents...that's the only happiness he sees in the future, at least for right now.  Thankfully, Severus will be determined to make him see otherwise.
Title: Chapter 13 30 May 2008 3:36 am
Reviewer: Anne T. Squires (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Thank you for the end notes. That certainly explains away my concerns. I feel so sorry for suicidal Harry. **Hugs him tight** IMHO, he needs some time with Ron and Hermione.

    I was proud of how Severus was acting in this chapter. He really is making an effort. Every little kindness can help repair their relationship. Severus certainly has the desire. As the saying goes, where there's a will, there's a way. I think Harry wants a relationship with Severus too. He just doesn't know he wants that. People really can change, but their attitudes and their relationships.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you!  I hope I can work things out satisfactorily with Harry.  Seeing Ron and Hermione would be good for him right now, but it just isn't going to happen for a while yet.  Severus doesn't realise how bad Harry's depression is and it hasn't even occurred to him to bring 'Weasley and Granger' into his home...he isn't at that point yet.  But Harry's friends will be in the story eventually, don't worry.  I think SC will be fairly long, so there's a lot left to happen.

    I'm glad you like Severus here.  He really is trying hard, and you're right about Harry, too.  He would like to become close to Severus, but he doesn't realise it yet.  His hesitation isn't so much because he's angry about past abuses, though that certainly does make it hard for him to trust Severus.  But Harry's hesitation is because he's afraid to believe that Severus really has changed, afraid that it won't last and that Severus will go back to his old ways.  Harry really just wants a family, someone who loves him, but he thinks all chance of that happening died with Sirius and he can't conceive of having it with Severus yet.

Title: Chapter 13 30 May 2008 3:17 am
Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) [Report This]
    I'm enjoying your story. I would agree with your other reviewer that Harry is too cowed, but I also understand that the slavery spell would tend to alter his behavior because he is depressed and worried and even suicidal.

    However, I do think that your Severus is changing much much too quickly. I understand that he feels somewhat guilty about the incident in his potions lab and about accusing Harry unjustly about the diary, but that doesn't give us enough reason why Severus would be already starting to care about Harry. Guilt (in my opinion anyway) doesn't create warm feelings. Severus needs to get to know and understand Harry in order to start to care for him.

    That said, I do think your story is an interesting one that gives the reader lots to think about.

    Do please keep writing.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I think the slavery spell, plus feeling responsible for Sirius' death has had a big effect on Harry's personality, but as I said earlier I also tend to see Harry as being more humble and quiet than some people see him.  I don't know about Severus.  This part of the story is probably the most difficult for me.  I think it's tricky trying to write this stage of the relationship where they're not enemies, but are not completely close and comfortable around one another.  I don't know; maybe Severus is changing too quickly, but I've also had reviewers say that this part is dragging, too, and that Harry and Severus seem to be stuck.  What's that saying about 'you can't please everybody', lol?  I just have to do the best I can, but I certainly do plan to keep writing!
Title: Chapter 13 30 May 2008 2:20 am
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    Nice use of canon there at the end. It was another creative way for Severus to try to show Harry that he is trying to make amends. I agree with you that the death of Sirius and then being thrust into slavery could certainly cow Harry into being overly submissive. I have also seen it done where he becomes overly belligerant, but it can be done realistically both ways, so I have not had problems with Harry seeming OOC here.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I'm glad you liked the "Quidditch Through the Ages" part, and that you can understand how Harry is right now.  Yes, I've read belligerant Harry, too, and it can also be understandable, but I don't think I could write belligerant well.  Thanks again.
Title: Chapter 13 30 May 2008 1:40 am
Reviewer: iluvchocs (Anonymous) [Report This]
    This was a great update. I really like the way Harry referred to the Firebolt as Snape's, and then Snape corrected him - starting to garner a little bit of trust, I hope.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I hoped it would be a good moment for them, too.  And Severus is working on building that trust, even though he does have a lot to make up for.
Title: Chapter 13 30 May 2008 1:19 am
Reviewer: Al101 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I love your story. I have only recently discovered fanfinction and have read many stories so far and I have to say yours is one of the best! I can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I remember how excited I was when I first discovered fanfiction.  I described as finding a library with thousands of books all about my favorite stories and characters...I was like a kid in a candy shop, literally.  I hope you'll have fun!
Title: Chapter 13 29 May 2008 11:42 pm
Reviewer: Elise_Malfoy (Signed) [Report This]
    Yay, can't wait for the next chapter! This one was SO good, I love the way you write Sev.
    Hehe, I liked the tea scene best. Especially when Sev touched Harry's hand, and what he said. That was SO sweet!
    And I don't think Harry's OOC. I actually thing this is more IC than anything. I always thought Harry was much more humble and...quiet than cocky like he's written a lot of times. And I think all the 'Yes sirs' and 'No sirs' are perfect. Don't change a thing.
    Well, can't wait for the next chapter!
    -Elise

    Author's Response:

    Thank you so  much, Elise!  I'm enjoying your Severus, too!  (I've read all your chapters, just have to get caught up on reviewing).  I'm really happy you enjoyed the tea scene because I love just writing all the little details of daily life, having Severus and Harry take little steps towards becoming closer, and slowly they'll realise that they're actually enjoying spending time together. 

    Glad you like Harry, and I agree...I too think Harry is basically more humble and quiet than not.  He can show a defiant streak on occasion, but usually only after he's really been pushed far.  I do know Harry has faults and isn't perfect, but I just love him and really think he's a great kid.

Title: Chapter 13 29 May 2008 11:39 pm
Reviewer: Nightshade (Anonymous) [Report This]
    THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    I LOVE THIS CHAPTER!!! It's very interesting. Do you really plan to make a sequel? I can't wait for the next chapter. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON! THIS STORY IS JUST TOO GOOD!!!!
    Thanks for reading and writing.

    Author's Response: Thank you, too!  I'm glad you liked the chapter.  Yes, I do think I'm going to do a sequel...I'm really loving this universe.  It's hard sometimes, because I've got so much of it planned out in my head, and I want to just share it all at once, but of course it takes time, especially if the story is a fairly long one.  But it'll get there eventually, I suppose, and the journey is half the fun.

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