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Reviews For Slave Child
Can't wait for more chapters, keep them coming please ;) Cecilia Author's Response: Thank you so much for your wonderful comments! Yes, Severus has also been greatly affected by the spell, but in his case it is a positive change. He was content before, but only because he'd never really had someone to share his life with, someone that he could care for anyway, and he doesn't even realise yet how much that means to him. But he will. And yep, it can be tricky trying to work around the spell, but Severus is determined to be very careful.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so happy you like it! I will admit that this story is my favorite and its special to me, too. Thanks again!
Anyway, chapter fifteen is lovely. Also, it came rather quickly after chapter fourteen. Thank you for the alacrity of your updates. I think Harry's and Snape's relationship is developing quite believably and nicely. I loved the entire scene of Snape waking Harry all the way until he gave Harry his potions and sent him back to bed. I'm glad Snape is thinking more about the ramifications of the slavery spell and exactly what it means for Harry's life. The tickling spell was an interesting yet wise choice on Snape's part. I'm glad to see Harry begin to warm to Snape. And Snape is so very, very considerate. Almost ooc; but, that's okay; I like your Snape. I love the part where he resized Harry's robe. (Btw, I'm from the US, so I don't know for sure... but I've seen that sort of robe referred to as a dressing gown in most HP fics I read. Where I'm from we would say "bathrobe.")At any rate, it was caring and sweet for Snape to resize the robe for Harry. I just said Snape did something sweet. Can't believe it. ***grins*** I do hope that Snape learns about the fact that Harry is suicidal. If their relationship continues to grow in the same vein, then I'm certain Snape will be able to help. I am not certain that Snape could really help Harry with this at this point; but perhaps later. Thank you for sharing your writing. (Crosses fingers that I am actually able to submit this review.) Author's Response: Yay, it did go through! I'm sorry you're having so much trouble with posting and thank you for trying to hard...it does mean a lot to me! Are you a member? I don't know, but since it says 'anonymous' by your name, I'm thinking you're probably not. If you joined, it might be easier. Or I'm also posting "Slave Child" on Fanfiction.net if that's any easier for you. I know how frustrating it can be when you type something and then lose it, so I'm just trying to think of a way that might be better for you (and I love your reviews, too)! Yep, my Slave Child muse is going strong right now, but I'm afraid it may be a week or two before chapter 16 is up cause I really do need to work on "Potions Professor" next...though I'm brimming over with ideas for the Defense lesson and some other things for "Slave Child" and it's going to be hard to make myself wait, lol! I'm happy you're liking the interaction between Sev and Harry! Heh, maybe Severus is OOC, but I just can't seem to help it. I guess because I'm too soft-hearted myself. Yep, you're right...I think the 'sleep-robe' might ought to be a 'dressing gown' (or bathrobe, it's what we say too). That was a fun little scene to write, and you wouldn't believe how long it took me to decide on how Severus should wake Harry. I finally decided the Tickling Charm was the nicest way...maybe not what Severus would have really chosen, but here and now, he is trying to repair things with Harry and is trying to be nice (or sweet, even though he'd have fits if he heard us). I don't know how well Severus could help Harry with the suicidal thoughts right now. I think he'd try, but his efforts might not be enough just yet. We'll probably begin to see in a few more chapters, though once I begin writing, things do tend to drag out longer than I'd originally expected. But I guess that's good since I'm trying to make SC be a long story...I just love long stories myself! Thanks again!
Author's Response: Thank you! I do love softie Sev!
I also like the part where he thinks about girls. It shows that he is gaining some of his self esteem to be able to even think about things like that (even though he quickly dispelled the thought). And the short thing was cute because if Harry is griping about his physical appearance then at least he wants to look good you know? Please update again soon. Oh it would be cute if Severus teased Harry about being short during their lessons. Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you're liking Severus and Harry; they're fun to write, definitely. Harry doesn't trust easily. He's never had much reason to trust people, especially adults. I think his trust would be hard to earn, but he would be very loyal once he does decide to let a person into his heart. I think at this point that Harry would like to be able to trust Severus; the poor kid really does want a family or parental figure, I think, but he just isn't able to. Severus has been pretty horrible to Harry for five years before this summer, and it's only been about 3 weeks or so since Harry came to live with him. I think, given their past in particular and Harry's previous experiences with not being able to count on the adults in his life, that it's just a little too soon for Harry to be able trust Severus and everything be all right. I may have Severus tease Harry about being short later in the story, but not yet. Severus wants to repair their relationship, so he's being very careful not to do anything to cause any more damage, and for all he knows Harry could be sensitive about his height. And, though I'm not at all sure about this and I might be wrong, but I'm thinking canon Severus may be on the short side, too. It seems like I remember him being described as short somewhere...
Author's Response: Aw, the million dollar question...to be honest, I haven't completely decided on an answer yet. When I began the story, I intended for Harry to remain a slave, because I said he was example of how a person's life could be changed by an accident or a disease, and how they have to adjust to it, but can still live a full and rewarding life. That's how I'm seeing Harry's case, and I thought (and still do think) that it could be life-affirming to write the story that way. But lately I've also been thinking that maybe I would find a way to free Harry either in this story or in the sequel, and give it that perfect happy ending. As for Harry being depressed, yes, he is right now. This is a really hard time for him...it's only been a few weeks since Sirius died and he's grieving and blaming himself. He's fallen victim to the slavery spell, which has had a profound effect on his life and the way he feels about himself, and he's facing the fact that he's the only person who can defeat Voldemort. So yeah, poor Harry really does have a lot on his shoulders. It's hard for me to write him like this sometimes, but I am trying to imagine how he would feel at this point in time, trying to deal with these heavy burdens that have fallen on him. Things will get better for Harry. It helps me to know all the things I have planned for him in the future, but I want "Slave Child" to be a long story so I'm trying to take my time and show all the details of his daily life with Severus and it's important to show how Severus is slowly changing and learning to care for Harry, or their future relationship won't be as believable, imo. So even though Harry is very unhappy and depressed now, and will be for a while still, I do hope that if people hang in there til the end of this little saga, they'll be satisfied with the ending, I hope!
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, Harry is looking forward to death right now. He sees it as the only chance he has for happiness, but that will change, I promise. And I thought Severus should respect Harry's privacy enough not to pry too much about the nightmare. It seems to me that in Harry's case, Severus really should be extra careful about respecting Harry's rights precisely because Harry's under the slavery spell.
Author's Response: Thank you! Harry's dream was about Sirius' death.
Author's Response: Thank you! I have the first hug all planned out, but it won't be for a while still. I'm really happy you're liking the story. Thanks again! |
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