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Reviews For Slave Child
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. It was fun to write. I've been looking forward to this chapter for a long time.
I'm glad I did, though I wasn't comfortable with the thought of Harry ending his life, I understand why he wants to so badly join his family. The emotions in this story are very strong, I can really understand the characters! I like that you took a slow development with Sev and Harry's relationship and built up to a point where Sev decided to change his ways of thinking and acting around Harry. It makes it much more realistic over a quick little jump. I’m happy you have humor to lighten up things after dark moments too. I'm so glad Sev got there in time to stop Harry and that Harry stopped to think! It’s great they finally talked things out and that they plan to take new plans to improve things. I look forward to reading more of this story and hope you'll post the next chapter soon! :) Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you decided to give it a chance and that you approve of Harry's and Severus' relationship. I'll try to update again sometime this weekend.
i know that this is only the first step in healing harry... hope that this story continues the journey. Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, this is the first step, but they do still have a ways to go.
I think the way you deal with Harry's suicidal thoughts is incredibly sensitive and well written. Thanks for a remarkable story. Please update soon. Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it, though I don't want you to get into trouble at work, lol! I'll try to update again sometime this weekend.
I'm not sure of your nationality (and if you are British I apologise), but in the UK a 'sleep robe' is usually a dressing gown and in hospital one sleeps in a bed not a cot. Cots are where babies sleep! Author's Response: Hi again! >>>It must be hard to deal with reviewers who unwittingly make comments inviting spoilers! Oh, not really hard, but sometimes I can't answer a question or respond as fully as I would like. On that note, Harry and Severus are going to talk more about the conditions of the spell in the next couple chapters. No, I'm American, not British. Someone else pointed out that a sleep robe is called a dressing gown in the UK, and I could have kicked myself, because I did know that, but I think my brain just wasn't working properly when I wrote that. I kept thinking of 'robe' but knew I needed to distinguish it from the regular wizard robes. I keep meaning to go back and change that, but I haven't gotten around to it yet. I did not know that 'cot' was more like a cradle. Here it's a bed, but a small, narrow one...not like a nicer one you would have at home or such. Thanks again!
Okay, true confession. I am going to sound like a complete idiot; but I don't know how to PM. I know what it is, I can see the icon on the bottom tool bar; but, I've never used it. I can completely understand not being able to answer all my questions. I am sorry I asked about spoilery things. Very sorry about that. When I leave a review I like to let the author know what their story makes me wonder. Do you, by any chance have a livejournal account? If you do that would be a great way to communicate. My name over there is anne_squires. Original, huh? Author's Response: Hi, there again! Oh, don't feel bad...I'm one of the world's worst when it comes to computer proficiency, lol. I'm always having to ask how to do the simplest things and I feel so stupid when I do, lol. I don't have livejournal, but you are a member of The Prince and the Seeker, aren't you? I think I can send you a PM through there. I'll try it and you can let me know if you get it, all right? Kristeh
I also think that Snape is underestimating the difficulties the spell will cause. He assures Harry that he will be happy there, but Harry is 16. He won't be able to do what normal teenagers do - get a job, go away with friends, have relationships, aspire to a future. Of course, Harry hasn't done the latter so far, but one assumes that as he recovers and discovers he can have a life that he might start, like his peers, to think of careers and future. The slavery spell stops that, which I think will be very hard to deal with. If Dumbledore fails to find a cure, of course..... Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoying the story. Severus and Harry still have aspects of the spell to talk about, some of which are the very things you've mentioned...a career, future relationships, etc. I don't want to go into much detail here because I don't want to give away spoilers, but if you go back and read the actual conditions of the slavery spell, it may not be quite so restrictive. But Severus and Harry will talk about these things in upcoming chapters. Thank you again!
I'm so glad that Harry believed Severus when he told him that he loved him. I believed him too. That shows how talented you are. The reader can believe that Severus has truly reached that point. So glad Severus wants to adopt Harry. I also understand why Harry doesn't want that, because of the fact that his slave status would come out. Very realistic reactions on the part of both characters. Will Harry's slave status be revealed at some point though? I can see reporters digging until they find out why Harry has to stay with Severus. Skeeter would leave no stone (or spell book) unturned. I'm also glad that Harry was able to articulate how the spell made him feel less than others. I'm glad Severus had the presence of mind to ask Harry about that in the first place. About time too. I also liked Severus' response to that. I hope Harry and Severus continue to discuss how the spell makes Harry feel. Until now the slavery issue has been a bit like the elephant in the parlor that no one talks about. That can't be healthy. Plus, there are things Harry needs to know, like the inheritance issue. I thought the way you timed the action was perfect, very tight, well paced. A lot of tension, and then relief at exactly the right moment. I couldn't read fast enough. Again, as I have noted in other chapters, everything is very realistic. Query: Do you think Harry's plan would have worked if Severus hadn't stopped him? He wasn't really trying to escape, was he? Well, he was, in the sense that he wanted to escape his life. What I guess I'm asking is, would just leaving without his master's permission be enough for the spell to think he was actually trying to escape? If so, then the spell is highly restrictive indeed. At some point, when Harry is better, I think it would be interesting to explore just how restrictive the spell is. Harry needs to be in a psychological place where he can take it in stride; but, it would be interesting to read about Harry being thwarted by the spell. I would like to read more about how the spell impacts Harry on a daily basis other than just having to live with Severus. Will Harry receive some sort of professional therapy? He tried to kill himself. He needs professional help. Well, he would if this were real life. Someone needs to mention to Harry that his parents and Sirius died literally while fighting to save Harry's life. Killing himself would the the exact opposite of what they were fighting for. It would make a mockery of their deaths if Harry were to try to kill himself. Someone (Severus) needs to explain this to Harry. Author's Response: Thank you, Anne! Well, knowing Severus, I think he wouldn't stop until Harry had given him that promise. Otherwise, Harry would have a permanent companion, as in 'I'm not letting you out of my sight for one second'. Severus really does love Harry by now, as you said. He might not have been able to articulate it for a while yet if he hadn't realised what a dire situation it was and that Harry really needed to know, that it was an actual matter of life and death for him to open up and share his feelings with Harry. But the love was definitely already there. The adoption matter has not ended, either, but right now Harry is not in a place where he can handle people knowing about the slavery spell and Severus recognised that. Yes, they absolutely needed to talk about the slavery spell and its effects on Harry. And there's still a lot for them to discuss and deal with, but at least they've made a start. I think Severus let it go for a while, because he knew it hurt Harry, and he didn't want to bring up a painful subject. But now he's realised that painful as it is to talk about, it's even worse not to discuss it, and that by talking they can figure out ways to help Harry. Will Harry receive professional help? Well, he does need it and in the real world I think Severus would already have parked himself and Harry in a therapist's office. But I'm not going to have there be therapists or such in the wizarding world, so Severus is going to take on the bulk of that role. He will do everything he can to educate himself on depression, though. And yes, someone will point out to Harry that his parents and Sirius died to save him. It may be Severus, or it may be Ron and Hermione, even. You asked two other questions: 'Will the slavery spell be revealed to the public?' and 'Would Harry's plan have worked if Severus hadn't come home early and stopped him in time?' I don't want to answer these questions here because they touch on plot points that will come up later. If you really want to know and don't want to wait, then if you can let me know how to PM you, I'll tell you everything in private. Would that be okay? Thanks again!
Author's Response: Thank you! I love all the mushy stuff!
Author's Response: Thank you! I do love the mush and angst! What's in store? Well, Harry's friends have scarcely been in the story at all and I want to include them. Draco still has to be dealt with, of course, and I want to go into the school year. I may even try to write a Quidditch game, who knows, lol! |
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