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Reviews For Slave Child
Author's Response: Thanks! I was more interested in exploring the emotional aspects of the slavery spell.
Author's Response: Is this when Harry catches pneumonia? As the spell, we're getting close to the resolution, so hopefully the spell's dormancy will make sense then.
Author's Response: Thank you! I love the long ones, too.
Author's Response: Thank you! Though Neville is not a main character, he will appear periodically, so there might be some bits between him and Severus.
Okay, I love this story and once again, this chapter did not disappoint. Personally, I don't think you need the end notes warning us that you know Draco is OOC and there is a reason. It was clear to me that something was going on with Draco and I trust the author to reveal it when she judges that the time is right. I didn't even think he was OOC, really. There's a range of behavior that's "in character" for each person, and assuming Draco has something on his mind, he was definitely not out of his range. I think it would be good for you to have more faith in your storytelling skills, which are very good -- you shouldn't feel you have to justify your choices -- let the story tell itself is my motto. That's not to say that I don't reply to concerns in reviews, because I think you know I do, but in the chapter itself, I find it disruptive, personally. In my view, the meeting with Draco wasn't anti-climactic, either. It was --unpredictable-- which is a very nice thing in a story. Sure, the cliché pattern would be an exchange of insults and then hexes, yadda yadda. That you didn't go that way and you clearly have something more deep/thought-out planned is wonderful and exciting! I think your story is going swimmingly well. There is one thing I'm wondering about, and it's that things have been going SO well for Harry and Snape for a while now, in terms of their getting along, that I'm kind of hungry for some conflict there. You know? It's worked fine so far -- don't get me wrong -- because Snape has been very careful around Harry, for obvious reasons. However, I wonder how long he can keep up the "perfect dad" routine. Harry's been on tenterhooks too, but sooner or later he's bound to upset the man, and Snape being Snape, he might not handle it as well as we'd like. Life is made of conflict and real people are flawed, and now that they're past the first flush of "we're going to make this work," I'm wondering how long it will be before some conflict comes along to present them with some challenges! Feel free to email me (I think you have my address) if you want to discuss anything I've touched on here -- I love this story a lot! Aspen a fan Author's Response: Hi, Aspen! Thank you so much! It means a lot to me that you are enjoying the story. Yes, you're right, that there is a great range of behavior that each person is capable of, in stories just as in real life. I suppose I put the end notes there simply because I thought the meeting between the boys would be unpredictable and maybe disappoint some people, and I thought it might be easier just to say what I wanted to say once, rather than a bunch of times. Yes, there is a reason for Draco's behavior, and I hope it will make sense once we get to that point. And yeah, no relationship is perfect so I suppose there does need to be some conflict between Severus and Harry. I tried to have a little tension between them in the last couple chapters, when Severus was upset about Harry forgetting the note and then Harry fearing that he'd ruined their relationship. I am going to try to add some more little problems, too, if I can. Again, thank you and I'm really happy that you are enjoying "Slave Child"!
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Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I did know the meeting wasn't what people were expecting, but there is a reason. I hope it will be plausible when it's revealed. I don't know if that will be in the next chapter or not, probably within the next few, though. Thanks again! |
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