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Title: Occlumency 24 Jan 2022 9:35 pm
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    Another terrific start to your story
Title: Occlumency 03 Mar 2015 3:51 am
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    That was a tough occlumency lesson. It sounds like Snape was even put off balance by Harry's emotional outburst. If he had been containing his emotions, maybe it was good for him to get it out, even if it was in front of Snape.
Title: Occlumency 01 Mar 2011 5:36 pm
Reviewer: chrmisha (Signed) [Report This]
    Phenomenally good! I'm hooked! Fantastic writing!
Title: Occlumency 28 Jun 2009 6:01 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    I don't know if I already reviewed when you first posted this, but I'm doing it now. This is very well written, and I feel like I'm reading Canon, because you keep the characters real. Very well done.

    Author's Response:

     You wouldn't be the first person to have reviewed multiple times, but you will probably be the first to review every chapter, if this keeps up. And I would much rather multiple reviews than none, so by all means, keep going! Thank you for all your kind words. I do so try to keep everyone in character.

Title: Occlumency 19 Jun 2008 5:24 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    I don't see anything to critisc, ignore my spelling. I know it's dreadful, :( Thank you for writing this, the Occlumencey lessons were what made the Order of Phoenix my favorite HP book. I wonder how defense will go, :(
Title: Occlumency 04 Mar 2008 6:26 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    Very nice first chapter! I hope you will update again soon and that this will be a LONG story! :) Ireally enjoyed how long it was! Snape & Harry were perfect. Can't wait for more.
    Scorpia
Title: Occlumency 24 Feb 2008 1:57 am
Reviewer: Nilla (Signed) [Report This]
    Great beginning! I hope to read more of this story soon :)
Title: Occlumency 17 Feb 2008 4:52 pm
Reviewer: wolfawaken (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I love this story. Even tho it's 1st chapter and if the rest chapters is like this,I will be reading every chapters coming up soon, I hope.
Title: Occlumency 17 Feb 2008 3:20 pm
Reviewer: DC Lady (Signed) [Report This]
    Very nice. I agree with your premise that Harry would have had a longer time getting over the death of Sirius, as well as the continuation of the Occlumancy lessons. I'm glad to see it used in this story.

    Eaglery awaiting more. :-)
Title: Occlumency 12 Feb 2008 6:32 pm
Reviewer: Viper (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Dear Aethyr,

    I must say that I am curious whare it is leading. I have not seen too much typical events so I look forward to read your story. I appreciate that you start the way you did, thare are too many stories that the first few chapters are rich in Potter's history and just make me bored. But your story just make me want read more and more. I was disappointed it had only one chapter so far. But I think it will be "mended" soon.

    Story flow smooth and make an interesting reading, I will gladly read next chapters. I'm not native speaker so I cannot say about grammar, but I suppose it's alright.

    The thing I really enjoyed? The way Snape behaved after learning that Harry cried. It showed that Snape indeed had a heart (or was not immune to human feelings). But on the other hand he was not so soft as to hug Harry. You kept balance and it is thing to admire. I do not know why, but it was the thing that said: "It is going to be a good story".

    And I do not agree with Malora. I really liked your POVs. It show things that makes story more... impartial? We did not know what Snape think, but we did know that he really thought something.

    Waiting for more,
    Viper

    PS. I know that my english is horrible, but I couldn't help but comment.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you for reviewing!

    I am glad you like my Snape. I prefer him in-character in fanfiction, myself. You're right, he's no softie!

    Pax vobiscum,

    Aethyr

    P.S. Out of curiosity, where are you located? 


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