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Reviews For Harry Potter and the Princes of Slytherin
Well, Harry sure got a revelation! That scene during last Occlumency lessons was intense, I sure would feel uncomfortable in the room. Well, looks like Harry is going to try again though, good for him! I'll keep an eye out for your next update! I'm curious about what will happen now with Harry's new determination. Author's Response: Welcome back! I'm glad you felt it uncomfortable (well, you know what I mean). It was meant to be such, and it is a great compliment to say that you felt as the characters did. Thank you!
If you have time, would you mind reading one of mine, I always love to get new readers' opinions. I have several posted here, so just pick one, though there are 2 different series, but the prequel to Never Again is just started, so you would need to start with the sequel, not that it matters. Or you could read Heir to Prince Manor, it has Draco and Harry in it, as brothers. Author's Response: That's what I thought, too, that all too often, authors had Dumbledore inconsiderate of Snape's discomfort. I don't think my Dumbledore would go so far as to suggest a solution, though. I don't know; I'll poke him and see if he does. Thanks for reviewing! I'll take a look at your work sometime; no promises as to when, but I'll leave a review when I do.
"The old man smiled then, from his beard to his eyes." It feels a bit passive, I think, and a little halting. It's not a bad line at all, but it's not a great one either. "The angle of Dumbledore’s head was such that his eyes again met Harry’s." This sentence feels a little odd. I understand what it is saying, but I don't know... Also, I love how you're showing how Harry is changing, becoming more determined. In book 5, had Dumbledore asked about how everything was going he would have said no. In your story and in book 6, he says yes, but you also support it with why he has suddenly changed. which is very good, and this story totally rocks! Author's Response: Thank you very much for taking the time! I'm glad you like my portrayal of Harry (and my story!).
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