Potions and Snitches
Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Title: Stakes 19 Jun 2008 5:55 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    I like your titles, there short, blunt and seem kind of cold. They can give you shivers, tell you that this is a good story. Long chapter titles are messy, and don't look amature. Your story is very well written, I suggest that you leave them as they are or change it so that there just titled chapter one and two. A good name for chapter two if your looking for something that's longer, how about 'What's At Stake'? The scene when they were talking about Harry's cubouard made me excited. I hope to see more chapters soon!
Title: Occlumency 19 Jun 2008 5:24 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    I don't see anything to critisc, ignore my spelling. I know it's dreadful, :( Thank you for writing this, the Occlumencey lessons were what made the Order of Phoenix my favorite HP book. I wonder how defense will go, :(
Title: Stakes 01 May 2008 11:17 pm
Reviewer: kreacher (Signed) [Report This]
    this fic is shaping up to be a good one, harry needsa to learn to trust snape, i know it will be dificult and trust goes both ways, but if harry is the bigger man, maybe snape will play the part to and somehow meet in the middle
Title: Stakes 08 Apr 2008 5:17 pm
Reviewer: Nilla (Signed) [Report This]
    Very exciting chapter! I hope there is an update coming soon :) I just love the way you portray Snape and Harry too of course, but Snape is always the hardest to do a god job on.
Title: Stakes 05 Mar 2008 2:02 am
Reviewer: snarky Beth (Signed) [Report This]
    This story is looking to be a really good read. It seems you've put alot of thought into this story, you've done a good job in making it believable and realistic. The characters sound well in character and the emotions are done beautifuly, you can really understand how Harry is fealing about everything. Excellent job, I'm into this story so I truly hope you will PLEASE post again soon!

    P.S. Since you mentioned this story is AU, is it safe to assume the character deaths Rowling made will be forgotten? I sure hope so.

    Author's Response:

    I'm so glad that the readership is enjoying my story. I will try to post as often as I can, but it is unfortunately not as often as I would like. In Real Life, I am in high school, so homework and extracurricular commitments get in the way.

     My story currently follows canon. It will go AU after book 6, so all character deaths from Half-Blood Prince still hold. As per my Story Notes, the deaths following book 6 are based upon my predictions from before Deathly Hallows was released.

    Pax vobiscum,

    Aethyr 

Title: Occlumency 04 Mar 2008 6:26 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    Very nice first chapter! I hope you will update again soon and that this will be a LONG story! :) Ireally enjoyed how long it was! Snape & Harry were perfect. Can't wait for more.
    Scorpia
Title: Occlumency 24 Feb 2008 1:57 am
Reviewer: Nilla (Signed) [Report This]
    Great beginning! I hope to read more of this story soon :)
Title: Occlumency 17 Feb 2008 4:52 pm
Reviewer: wolfawaken (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I love this story. Even tho it's 1st chapter and if the rest chapters is like this,I will be reading every chapters coming up soon, I hope.
Title: Occlumency 17 Feb 2008 3:20 pm
Reviewer: DC Lady (Signed) [Report This]
    Very nice. I agree with your premise that Harry would have had a longer time getting over the death of Sirius, as well as the continuation of the Occlumancy lessons. I'm glad to see it used in this story.

    Eaglery awaiting more. :-)
Title: Occlumency 12 Feb 2008 6:32 pm
Reviewer: Viper (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Dear Aethyr,

    I must say that I am curious whare it is leading. I have not seen too much typical events so I look forward to read your story. I appreciate that you start the way you did, thare are too many stories that the first few chapters are rich in Potter's history and just make me bored. But your story just make me want read more and more. I was disappointed it had only one chapter so far. But I think it will be "mended" soon.

    Story flow smooth and make an interesting reading, I will gladly read next chapters. I'm not native speaker so I cannot say about grammar, but I suppose it's alright.

    The thing I really enjoyed? The way Snape behaved after learning that Harry cried. It showed that Snape indeed had a heart (or was not immune to human feelings). But on the other hand he was not so soft as to hug Harry. You kept balance and it is thing to admire. I do not know why, but it was the thing that said: "It is going to be a good story".

    And I do not agree with Malora. I really liked your POVs. It show things that makes story more... impartial? We did not know what Snape think, but we did know that he really thought something.

    Waiting for more,
    Viper

    PS. I know that my english is horrible, but I couldn't help but comment.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you for reviewing!

    I am glad you like my Snape. I prefer him in-character in fanfiction, myself. You're right, he's no softie!

    Pax vobiscum,

    Aethyr

    P.S. Out of curiosity, where are you located? 


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