Potions and Snitches
Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Title: Chapter 1 26 Feb 2008 4:24 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Great start here and I'm anxious to learn how Harry nad Snape react to this startling development!
Title: Chapter 1 25 Feb 2008 4:07 am
Reviewer: celestialuna (Signed) [Report This]
    Good start.
Title: Chapter 1 24 Feb 2008 9:34 pm
Reviewer: ave (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Nice beginning. A.
Title: Chapter 1 24 Feb 2008 9:29 pm
Reviewer: ave (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Hi, I wanted to tell you that you have two typos in the summary (Prisoner and hear). It could repulse some potential readers. By, Ave

    Author's Response: I fixed that mistake. I'm typo prone...
Title: Chapter 1 23 Feb 2008 7:23 pm
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    "Especially when he said for the matter of your own safety that you're parents' will shouldn't be read or executed. He wanted you to live with you're mother's blood relatives " First use of "your" is correct. Your is a possessive, meaning something owns something. Both uses of "you're" are incorrect. "You're" is a contraction of "you are." If you cannot logically replace "you're" with "you are" it should be "your." Again, Harry is the possessor of his parents' will and his mother's blood protection. Sorry to be a little long on this, but twice in such a short space drove me nuts.

    I liked the way the Skeeter article read, but the use of "horrible things" in the last letter seemed a little young sounding for a ministry bureaucrat, unless you were going for "tongue-in-cheek".

    Author's Response:

    I get your and you're mixed up all the time. Ask anyone who I talk to on AIM and Windows Messenger. :P

    I glad you liked the Skeeter article. That was probably the easiest thing to write in the story thus far. As for the use of horrible things in the letter, with the exception of unbreakable vows, I couldn't find anything fightning enough and canon that will make you want to follow a binding magical contract so I left it rather vague. And who says that people in the ministry are serious? (ok, lame excuse...)

Title: Chapter 1 23 Feb 2008 5:00 pm
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    Lol, Hey Omega13a!
    This is Smelly Cat710, It's cool to see you on P&S. Just wanted to say that I thought the Boy-Who-Lived-Abused article was well written, it sounded just like Rita Skeeter! (May she burn!!) Lol, It's cool that you updated so quickly!
    Scorpia

    Author's Response: People keep saying that the Boy-Who-Lived-Abused article was good. It must be because I read and watch the news... I didn't update the story so quickly. I wrote chapter 1 a week ago, posted it on my own website and waited for feed back from the people on teddylonglong's yahoo group before posting it here and on fanfiction.net. I don't know when chapter three will be done as that I have to write some report for a history class I am taking... Anyways, I'm glad you liked my story.

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