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Title: Chapter 1 24 Feb 2008 9:29 pm
Reviewer: ave (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Hi, I wanted to tell you that you have two typos in the summary (Prisoner and hear). It could repulse some potential readers. By, Ave

    Author's Response: I fixed that mistake. I'm typo prone...
Title: Chapter 2 24 Feb 2008 3:48 am
Reviewer: snarky Beth (Signed) [Report This]
    This is going to be interesting story, I wonder how you'll twist things... Please update again soon, so we can all find out ^_^

    P.S. Please promise me that by Snape becoming Harry's guardian, his friendship with Ron will still last. I read a couple stories where they broke off their friendship and then so suddonly he turns bestest buddies with Malfoy, and I thought it was rediculous! Like they'd stop being best buds over a living arrangment, pshh. I have faith in you! lol.

    Author's Response: Don't worry about Ron not wanting to be friends with Harry over this. And don't worry about Harry suddenly becomming friends with Malfoy. The only story I've read where he becomes friends with Malfoy in a believable way is the Jamie Snape series on FanFiction.net. I doubt a similar thing will happen in my story as that there's now like two years of rivalry between them and its hard to go from hating someone to liking them.
Title: Chapter 2 23 Feb 2008 11:32 pm
Reviewer: strangergirl86 (Signed) [Report This]
    I like this so far. I like how you haven't changed Snape's character too much. Also enjoyed that this takes place in his third year, that year was always my favorite to read. Thanks for the story, can't wait for the next chapter.

    Author's Response: I try to keep things as cannon as possible.
Title: Chapter 2 23 Feb 2008 7:41 pm
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    I really like the idea for this, but I will not be able to enjoy it with all the incorrect words. You used "threw" instead of "through" about five times in this chapter--as well as "quite" instead of "quiet" and at least one other. Spell check can't spot these kinds of things.

    I like that Harry is getting information much sooner and I'm interested in how this will affect the way his life develops. Since this is AU, you may have decided to have the attempt to kill Snape continue to be in his 6th year as fandom thought for years. But according to DH, it actually happened in fifth year, amazingly before Snape's Worst Memory. James obviously DIDN'T learn anything from nearly killing Snape.

    Author's Response:

    As I said in the review you wrote for chapter 1, I make mistakes and lots of them. Maybe I do need a beta at this point...

    As for the attempt to kill Snape being in his 6th year instead of his 5th year like in cannon, goes to show you I'm not all knowing like people tend to think I am. I'm glad I demonstrated it in a public way.

    As for Harry learning things sooner then he did in cannon, that will be interesting to see where that goes. Maybe it might cause him to take studing more seriously though having Snape as a gardian would be motivation enough in my opinion...

Title: Chapter 1 23 Feb 2008 7:23 pm
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    "Especially when he said for the matter of your own safety that you're parents' will shouldn't be read or executed. He wanted you to live with you're mother's blood relatives " First use of "your" is correct. Your is a possessive, meaning something owns something. Both uses of "you're" are incorrect. "You're" is a contraction of "you are." If you cannot logically replace "you're" with "you are" it should be "your." Again, Harry is the possessor of his parents' will and his mother's blood protection. Sorry to be a little long on this, but twice in such a short space drove me nuts.

    I liked the way the Skeeter article read, but the use of "horrible things" in the last letter seemed a little young sounding for a ministry bureaucrat, unless you were going for "tongue-in-cheek".

    Author's Response:

    I get your and you're mixed up all the time. Ask anyone who I talk to on AIM and Windows Messenger. :P

    I glad you liked the Skeeter article. That was probably the easiest thing to write in the story thus far. As for the use of horrible things in the letter, with the exception of unbreakable vows, I couldn't find anything fightning enough and canon that will make you want to follow a binding magical contract so I left it rather vague. And who says that people in the ministry are serious? (ok, lame excuse...)

Title: Chapter 2 23 Feb 2008 6:20 pm
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    Hmmm, I am very much enjoying this one.

    It was smart of Harry to begin Prof Snape's summer assignment.

    Looking forward to more.

    Author's Response: Yes. That was very smart of Harry to do Snape's assignment first. With Snape's track record, I would be scared not to have even started his homework assignment before going to live with him...
Title: Chapter 1 23 Feb 2008 5:00 pm
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    Lol, Hey Omega13a!
    This is Smelly Cat710, It's cool to see you on P&S. Just wanted to say that I thought the Boy-Who-Lived-Abused article was well written, it sounded just like Rita Skeeter! (May she burn!!) Lol, It's cool that you updated so quickly!
    Scorpia

    Author's Response: People keep saying that the Boy-Who-Lived-Abused article was good. It must be because I read and watch the news... I didn't update the story so quickly. I wrote chapter 1 a week ago, posted it on my own website and waited for feed back from the people on teddylonglong's yahoo group before posting it here and on fanfiction.net. I don't know when chapter three will be done as that I have to write some report for a history class I am taking... Anyways, I'm glad you liked my story.
Title: Chapter 2 23 Feb 2008 3:22 pm
Reviewer: Phoenix1 (Signed) [Report This]
    This is pretty good, look forward to seeing another chapter.

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