EEEP! I LOVE IT! So interesting! I want to know what happens next! And I love the runon sentences thing, that's just like Harry!
I really like where this is going and what does it mean for Harry and Severus now? Please update it soon! I enjoy mysteries.
I loved this! You wrote a great beginning; I can't wait until you update!
Oh I really liked this first chapteer. Please continue!
I like this beginning. Lots of unanswered questions like why they are all at Grimmauld Place and what Draco is doing there, etc. The suspense is fun also.
I'm usually a pretty careful reader, but for some reason I had trouble following exactly what was going on. I had to read twice to figure out that Snape added his blood about half way through the chapter and then did several more trials. It could just be that my brain is foggy today, but if others had this problem you might work on the middle section some to clarify the sequence of events.
Author's Response: Thank you for the constructive criticism. I will take what you say into advisement. I really wanted the dialogue to carry this chapter and in doing that it may have appeared unclear at times what exactly was going on outside of the conversations that were taking place. Thank you for the review.
This was a completely engaging first chapter. I loved it! I was hooked from the very first sentence. You do a very nice job with dialogue, and I believe you've characterized Harry perfectly. Keep up the great work. This is fabulous, and I can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks for the comment about the dialogue. I LOVE writing dialogue. I know I will eventually have to throw in some long-winded paragraphs in order to explain everything. Thanks!
I was surprised that Harry & Snape didn't pass out from blood loss. :P I like fics where Harry, Draco & Severus get stuck somwhere like Grimwauld. I'm looking forwardd to reading more!
Scorpia
| Title: Chapter 1
| 28 Feb 2008 3:11 pm
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| Reviewer: NotEvenHere (Anonymous)
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I liked it! Great chapter. I loved Draco in it. He was cheeky and just fun. Of course, I need to know why they are together, the three of them! I hope they get some answers as well. Poor Harry and poor Sev...
Author's Response: I really like Draco, but he is very difficult to write. Well, for me anyway. I hope I can do justice to the character. Thanks for the review.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 28 Feb 2008 11:38 am
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| Reviewer: Eva (Signed)
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Oooh! It sounds really interesting, you know? I loved the way everyone was, hope you update soon!!!!
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