Harry's dreams...They are Interesting.
I have nothing else to say for this chapter. I am too excited for what may come.
| Title: Chapter 5
| 07 Apr 2009 9:09 am
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| Reviewer: Missy Eye (Anonymous)
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Now i know why albus wanted to know, because he's hopping itll be done soon, because he's got a hunch on what the minstry's planned for harry!
man ur good.
Hmmm. The aftermath of Harry's dream was intriguing. I can see that we have some interesting situations set up for us. Poor Harry. I always hate the portions of these stories when Severus and Harry are still at odds. And I think it will be a little harder in your story since Severus so clearly does like Draco. I suppose that Harry will need to get on better with Draco before Severus really looks at him more closely. I can't put my finger on why, but for some reason the dialogue between Severus and Dumbledore felt a little clunky. Their "voices" in that section just didn't ring as true as other sections.
Author's Response: Thanks for the constructive criticism. I'll take a look at the dialogue you mentioned and see if it can be tweeked. I think I was sort of in a rush to finish the chapter and may not have given the end the attention it deserved. As for your other comments, yes Severus does like Draco, alot. I also think it is important for Severus and Harry to continue to be at odds for awhile longer. I don't like the stories where Severus and Harry are lovey-dovey by chapter 3. I want there to be a gradual build up to an understanding they can both live with. Thanks for reviewing!
Hmm. . .dreams that reflect reality in the dreamer. I think I've heard of such things before in my psychology courses, only I can't remember the term they used for it. If Harry saw himself being killed in his dreams, would he nearly die? Not a good thing. I think Sev ought to teach him Occlumency, assuming the meeting goes okay.
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