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THIS SENTENCE. I FIND IT AMUSING. OH MAN. The suspense. WHAT WILL HAPPEN TO HARRY? Is Snape REALLY Harry's father? (Yes.) What will happen to Harry? What will happen to Draco? WILL THERE BE PUDDING?! This story. It is good. I like it.
the boy's in fucking perril u cant just leave us fucking hanging here!! Comeon, u know u want to update. Damn harry's got it tough as hell. the fucking minister's as basterd. what he did to harry should b illegal. hope harry can hold up
Scrimgeour is playing some twisted game here, isn't he? Trying to get harry to work with him by treating him like a criminal and making him afraid so he'll do and say whatever he wants him to. That's a typical politician. Harry needs to watch what he says to him. I hope Draco also watches what he does, for he's on dangerous ground too. I hope Snape gets Harry's letter and helps him. He could certainly use it. Oh, and I noticed a small error. In the paragraph where you have harry thinking about the results of the potion and whether Snape is his father, you wrote "Harry shuttered" instead of " Harry shuddered". The first word means to close a window, the other one is the action of trembling, which is what you want. Author's Response: In canon there was always something about Scrimgeour that gave me the creeps. He was better than Fudge, but I still didn't trust him. He had his own agenda and was quite ruthless. That was my take on him, anyway, and so I get to let it play out in this fic. Thanks for catching the error. I have gone in a corrected a few things.
Please update soon! You have me totally hooked! Poor poor harry!!
"Shutter", should be "shudder" "ear full", should be "earful" Otherwise, I love this story & particularly like that you don't bother to explain the link between Harry & Snape Author's Response: Thank you! I will fix those errors asap! It never fails! I use spellchecker, which of course does not caught EVERYTHING. I read through the chapter over a dozen times and yet there are still mistakes. Oh well...what can you do? Again, thank you. |
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