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Title: Chapter 7 28 Oct 2008 6:17 am
Reviewer: jolisgsd (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Wow! I was surprised by Harry's treatment. I thought it might be rough, but I didn't expect this! Hope someone (like Snape) comes to the rescue soon.

    So glad you updated.

    Author's Response: I was surprised by Harry's treatment, as well.  I was going for shocking, something with a sudden and immediate impact that would happen before Harry even had time to adjust to his new environment.  Thanks for reviewing!
Title: Chapter 7 28 Oct 2008 3:47 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Omg! Poor Harry! They left him starkers!

    Please update soon, I was so pleased to see your story there!

    Oh, now I'm hoping that he IS Snape's son, and that Snape rescues him!

    I hate Scrimgeour!

    Author's Response: Thanks for the review.  I hope to update soon.  I have already started chapter 8, so hopefully the wait won't be long.
Title: Chapter 7 28 Oct 2008 3:35 am
Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, my! Talk about being railroaded! I don't want to think about what state Harry will be in by the time that potion is completed and Severus finds out just what his relationship to Harry is. A very well written story. I love the way you have done the dialog.

    Author's Response: Yeah, Harry's state of well-being is in great jeapardy!   Thanks for your comment about the dialog.  I feel like I really struggle with that.  I love dialog and feel that sometimes I don't put in enough descriptive paragraphs.  I like to have my characters talking and doing versus the writer describing everything in painstaking detail.  Thanks for the review.
Title: Chapter 7 28 Oct 2008 2:25 am
Reviewer: mithrilandtj (Signed) [Report This]
    I would think that Scrimgeour's treatment of Harry would be illegal. He's a ward not a criminal.

    Author's Response: What?  The Ministry do something illegal and/or unethical???? 
Title: Chapter 7 28 Oct 2008 1:53 am
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I was afraid you had abandoned this fic, and it's very good, an unusual take.

    (It's descent, not decent)

    Author's Response: Oh!  Thanks for the correction.  I will fix that ASAP!  I will never abandon a fic.  This is the only one I have on P&S.  I have another fic on ff.net under the same author name.  It is called "Taking Back Sunday."  It has been forever since I updated that one, too.  If I abandon a fic, I will take it down completely rather than leaving it hanging in cyberland for eternity.  Thanks for the review.
Title: Chapter 7 27 Oct 2008 11:34 pm
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    What is up with them treating harry like some kind of criminal? It's really beginning to irritate me. I thought Scrimgeour was supposed to be a good guy. I hope Snape comes along and breaks Harry out of there and kicks some major butt!

    Author's Response: I know Scrimgeour is supposed to be a good guy, but there was always something about him (in canon) that I found creepy.  Not sure what it was, but there you have it.  I think I'm playing off that.  I think it might stem from Scrimgeour wanting to use Harry to boost the image of the Ministry during book 6.  He was also described as a pretty rough looking guy, almost lion-like.  Thanks for reading and the review!  And yes, there is bound to be some butt kicking!
Title: Chapter 6 04 Aug 2008 2:26 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    I love your story, and I hope that you are not going to abandon it. It's been a long time since you have updated.

    Please continue writing; I'm anxious to if and when the paternity test comes back positive!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for the review.  I have not abandoned the story and I do apologize for the delay in updating.  Real Life just gets in the way sometimes.  I personally hate reading uncompleted stories for the fear that they won't be finished.  So, thank you for reading this even though the last update was forever ago.  I promise to update as soon as humanly possible.

     

Title: Chapter 6 17 Apr 2008 4:04 pm
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    Now that was a totally unexpected turn of events. This story just got very intriguing. I especially want to know what was in Draco's paper. It may be a good thing that Harry is used to being abused at the Dursley's, poor boy.
Title: Chapter 6 16 Apr 2008 3:20 am
Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow, what an interesting turn of events! Sounds as though Severus may actually start hoping that he and Harry are father and son. But, how is that possible?

    I hope your next update is soon.

    Thanks for hooking me on your story.

    Author's Response: Yes, I think Severus hopes they are father in son, if for no other reason than to help Harry (the one who can defeat You Know Who) out of an impossibly bad situation.  How is it possible for Severus to be Harry's father?  I can't give that away yet!  Keep Reading!  Thanks for the review!
Title: Chapter 5 25 Mar 2008 8:22 pm
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    Hmmm. The aftermath of Harry's dream was intriguing. I can see that we have some interesting situations set up for us. Poor Harry. I always hate the portions of these stories when Severus and Harry are still at odds. And I think it will be a little harder in your story since Severus so clearly does like Draco. I suppose that Harry will need to get on better with Draco before Severus really looks at him more closely. I can't put my finger on why, but for some reason the dialogue between Severus and Dumbledore felt a little clunky. Their "voices" in that section just didn't ring as true as other sections.

    Author's Response: Thanks for the constructive criticism.  I'll take a look at the dialogue you mentioned and see if it can be tweeked.  I think I was sort of in a rush to finish the chapter and may not have given the end the attention it deserved.  As for your other comments, yes Severus does like Draco, alot.  I also think it is important for Severus and Harry to continue to be at odds for awhile longer.  I don't like the stories where Severus and Harry are lovey-dovey by chapter 3.  I want there to be a gradual build up to an understanding they can both live with.  Thanks for reviewing!

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