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Reviews For In Safe Hands
-P.G.
~Lesley~
But I've never read a fic where it's only in a child's point of view. (Or do later chapters switch between characters?) And I think you're really brave at attempting this with Harry being a three-year old. I know I wouldn't be able to do it! So, my hat's off to you! But the thing that I really, really loved, besides how in-character you kept everyone, was how Harry described Severus and Remus. It was interesting how he related everything uncertain going on to something he knew and understood. This also made it heart wrenching to read as those things Harry refered back to as 'normal' occurances were not normal at all. But atleast he's out of there! And hopefully Dumbledore will see reason and find a suitable alternative. I really do like the way you've set this up and I can't wait to read more...perhaps I'll be able to schedule in some time later tonight! Until then! Author's Response: It's two chapters in Harry's POV, and then switches to Snape's POV and a nameless narrator for the last part. Writing in Harry's POV was tiring (the challenge of it really tested my ability, I think), but offered some incredible opportunities for clever comparisons or funny moments. The main difficulty, of course, is that Harry could not interract with his surroundings beyond seeing and hearing what was there to see and hear. A lot of information is not available, namely the stuff you normally would have going on in the character's head as he makes connections and comes to a greater understanding of what is going on. Harry makes no connections; he is like a camera and microphone, hearing and seeing but giving us no insight. I started out writing the entire fic in Harry's POV and even had the last two chapters done in his POV, but it didn't work as well as I had hoped, so I had to change. Maybe at some point I'll be able to fix it, because I don't like a narrator voice and it still feels like I should have been able to avoid using one. Ayway, thank you for the great review of this chapter. :-)
I'm so glad the Very-Severe-Sounding Man and the Very-Soft-Sounding Man have come to take him away! Dumbledore better not even think of sending Harry back!
But (you knew this was coming) a few comments: "He even had a Very-Severe-Name." This would scan better as: "He even had a Very-Severe-Sounding-Name." "we're out of here" and "You're asking me" sound American, not British (though you may be a Brit for all I know). Men don't usually use 'darling' and 'Harrykins' for small children. Author's Response: I had a scene where Lupin explains that Harrykins is what Lily and James called Harry, and he was hoping Harry would remember it and be comforted... Unfortunately it broke up the scene so I cut it. Lupin is using a lot of silly fluffy words, but he doesn't know what else to do with Harry. I think it makes him sound more inept, sort of, because aside from calling Harry stupid names, he isn't doing a very brilliant job of handling him. Good point on the Americanisms, but I'm not sure what a more British equivalent would be. |
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