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Reviews For In Safe Hands
Title: Crapilogue 25 Mar 2008 5:29 am
Reviewer: pkrosche (Signed) [Report This]
    Aww...I'm glad that I found time tonight to read this...but I didn't know that this was the END! Oh well, you did a great job! I was just hoping that Snape could somehow keep Harry, but it's good to know that he at least helped out with his future. One question: Was Harry's scar hurting because of the woman (like a Quirrell from SS?) or Snape? Other than that, it was an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing! (Although I would really like a Sevitus sequel...)

    Author's Response:

    I did leave it open for a sequel... which unfortunately I can't even contemplate with two work-in-progress stories that have been severely neglected.

    It made me very sad that Snape didn't keep Harry or even stay in his life, but at least it seems like it was a good decision for Harry's sake. First Year Harry can't even remember being rescued, let alone the kind of hell he'd been rescued from. 

    The woman is a QuirrellMort, all right. Sirius took what would have been Quirrell's position, but do you think that will really stop Voldemort when there's a juicy Philosopher's Stone to be had? 

Title: A Stranger is Watching 25 Mar 2008 3:13 am
Reviewer: pkrosche (Signed) [Report This]
    I really love this start and if I could right now, I'd continue reading, but alas, I must put it off for a bit.

    But I've never read a fic where it's only in a child's point of view. (Or do later chapters switch between characters?) And I think you're really brave at attempting this with Harry being a three-year old. I know I wouldn't be able to do it! So, my hat's off to you!

    But the thing that I really, really loved, besides how in-character you kept everyone, was how Harry described Severus and Remus. It was interesting how he related everything uncertain going on to something he knew and understood. This also made it heart wrenching to read as those things Harry refered back to as 'normal' occurances were not normal at all. But atleast he's out of there! And hopefully Dumbledore will see reason and find a suitable alternative.

    I really do like the way you've set this up and I can't wait to read more...perhaps I'll be able to schedule in some time later tonight! Until then!

    Author's Response:

    It's two chapters in Harry's POV, and then switches to Snape's POV and a nameless narrator for the last part.

    Writing in Harry's POV was tiring (the challenge of it really tested my ability, I think), but offered some incredible opportunities for clever comparisons or funny moments. The main difficulty, of course, is that Harry could not interract with his surroundings beyond seeing and hearing what was there to see and hear. A lot of information is not available, namely the stuff you normally would have going on in the character's head as he makes connections and comes to a greater understanding of what is going on. Harry makes no connections; he is like a camera and microphone, hearing and seeing but giving us no insight. I started out writing the entire fic in Harry's POV and even had the last two chapters done in his POV, but it didn't work as well as I had hoped, so I had to change. Maybe at some point I'll be able to fix it, because I don't like a narrator voice and it still feels like I should have been able to avoid using one.

    Ayway, thank you for the great review of this chapter. :-) 

Title: In Safe Hands 25 Mar 2008 2:33 am
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Another great chapter! I loved how you've managed to show how Harry suffered by his reactions to Remus' kindness. Poor little thing.

    I'm glad that Remus and Severus at least have realised that Sirius is innocent. I only hope something can be done about that now, too, and of course that they can find a way to keep Harry safe.

    I just loved Remus taking care of Harry, with the bath and feeding him and playing with him.
Title: A Stranger is Watching 25 Mar 2008 2:17 am
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, I love this! My heart breaks for poor little Harry, and I just hate those Dursleys.

    I'm so glad the Very-Severe-Sounding Man and the Very-Soft-Sounding Man have come to take him away! Dumbledore better not even think of sending Harry back!
Title: Crapilogue 24 Mar 2008 11:23 pm
Reviewer: cbw (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Brilliant story. but do you really have to leave it there?
Title: Crapilogue 24 Mar 2008 11:11 pm
Reviewer: little-sun (Anonymous) [Report This]
    What a nice story! Harry safe, Sirius out of prison. Only Severus somewhat left out in the end. L-S

    Author's Response: Snape does tend to be left out, doesn't he? He never gets proper credit for anything.
Title: Crapilogue 24 Mar 2008 11:06 pm
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I wish you will consider expanding this, because it began brilliantly and sort of petered out in the last two chapters.
Title: This Little Baby 24 Mar 2008 11:04 pm
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Just a bit rushed--we didn't see the escape, which might have been interesting, especially to see how much Snape was implicated.

    Author's Response: Well, I have no clue how Snape pulled off that escape. :P
Title: In Safe Hands 24 Mar 2008 11:00 pm
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Another good chapter, and Harry's POV has real wit; I particularly liked the "Books-Everywhere-Room". Good scene where Lupin & Snape realize about Peter and Dumbledore's machinations.

    But: "Oh boy, you could really use a haircut, darling." I mean, no. 'Darling' and 'sweetie sound stupid coming from a man...'moppet' is okay.
Title: A Stranger is Watching 24 Mar 2008 10:44 pm
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Very good start. Smoothly written and very readable; excellent dialogue. Really liked the child's POV, which was well maintained and imagined. Gives the basic story (and there are dozens of them) disinction. The dynamic between Snape and Lupin is very good.

    But (you knew this was coming) a few comments:

    "He even had a Very-Severe-Name." This would scan better as: "He even had a Very-Severe-Sounding-Name."

    "we're out of here" and "You're asking me" sound American, not British (though you may be a Brit for all I know).

    Men don't usually use 'darling' and 'Harrykins' for small children.

    Author's Response:

    I had a scene where Lupin explains that Harrykins is what Lily and James called Harry, and he was hoping Harry would remember it and be comforted... Unfortunately it broke up the scene so I cut it.

    Lupin is using a lot of silly fluffy words, but he doesn't know what else to do with Harry. I think it makes him sound more inept, sort of, because aside from calling Harry stupid names, he isn't doing a very brilliant job of handling him.

    Good point on the Americanisms, but I'm not sure what a more British equivalent would be. 


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