Okay, that was lovely. I would like more of this world.
However, there was one thing (and you are not the only writer who does this) the word "dieing" does not exist. It is dying. You change the "ie" to "y" and add "ing." -( same with lie or tie, etc).
Will we see more of Severus and young Jamesie (Jamie would have worked too.)
u HAVE to write a sequel. i'm actually a little bit teary!that was so fantastic!
What a nice plot bunny to be nibbling on your toes like that. :-)
I liked it. Especially the fact that Severus' son is named James. Too funny.
I'll keep an eye out for any other plot bunnies you might have.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 31 Mar 2008 1:53 pm
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| Reviewer: Kazza (Anonymous)
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What a wonderful story! Thank you. I especially liked that it had moments of dark and light, and no instant redemption.
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