A rather nicely-done retelling - I like it. Can't wait to see what you've done in later tales.
| Title: The Sorcerer’s Stone
| 17 Aug 2009 9:37 pm
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| Reviewer: Baghi (Signed)
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Well, that was intresting to say the least. Vernon is totally hen-pecked, eh?
Nice story, if a bit short.
| Title: Troubles
| 27 Jul 2009 4:31 am
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| Reviewer: kasey (Anonymous)
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Only a month of detention for murdering an innocent animal?! And there's no questioning of Draco by Snape or Dumbledore?
A snotty, self-entitled child of a Death Eater murders an innocent animal & no one is concerned that he's started down the same sociopathic path as his father?
No one has questioned or even investigated how Harry ended up growing up homeless on the streets. He hasn't had a medical exam from Poppy. The supposed saviour of their way of life grows up a street kid & everyone just frowns sadly then goes on their way? Snape doesn't introduce himself to his first-years, so how are they to know who he is? Considering how he grew up, Harry is entirely too trusting. A street kid would be smart & wonder first off how in the hell he ended up on the streets if he's so all-fired important.
I've been hand-waving the utterly simplistic way some serious issues are being dealt with in your story. But this, Hedwig's murder & the lack of repercussions, marks the end for me.
| Title: Revelations and Christmas Tidings
| 14 Jun 2009 11:36 pm
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| Reviewer: RhiannanT (Signed)
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This is the second time I've read this fic (I love it!) and I come up with the same problem each time. I speak French, so Jardin for me means 'garden'. When I ignore that and read your pronunciation, I come up with Sardine. Sorry!
Good, but I'm curious about how Harry ended up with that man in the first place.
| Title: Halloween
| 09 Apr 2008 3:41 am
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| Reviewer: Diana (Anonymous)
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Harry's speech is unbearable. Plot is meh and Niamh seems like a poor man's Hermione, I mean if you're going for an original character, make it original and useful. I liked the premise not the execution.
| Title: The Sorcerer’s Stone
| 17 Aug 2007 5:19 pm
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| Reviewer: Rachlan (Anonymous)
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Excellent beginning! Can't wait to see what happens next! I like how you stuck to the books and yet changed things around. Very good!
| Title: The Sorcerer’s Stone
| 09 Aug 2007 4:24 pm
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| Reviewer: honore (Anonymous)
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Very nicely done, though how come he had to go back to the Dursely's? I don't think I am very fond of Dumbldore here. Apparently he can't find a clue. Going to read the next bit now. You write very well. Looking forward to more. Thanks
That was a great story, so great in fact that I am actually going to start reading the next in the series now despite the fact that it is now 11:33 and I have not slept since the day before yesterday. Damn these addicting fanfictions.
Wow,that was amazing. You had me on the edge of my seat the whole time.
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