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Reviews For Lily's Charm: The Gift
Author's Response: Thanks Ashley! It was fun to fiddle with it. :o)
And I never do this, but here are some of my absolute favorite lines: “Clearly his son needed an attitude adjustment. And he would get one.” -I seriously thought after reading this, “Good, Harry needs one! Go Sev!!” How strangely I would be both proud of the man and disappointed at the same time…he tried so hard, but I really think that if Sev just pushed a little more… ““Yeah, Potions,” Harry shrugged. “My dad won’t say anything,” he assured him as he gestured him to continue on to the library. “Your dad,” Ron retorted, “is still Snape.”” -Oh, Harry…this is terrible! I can’t believe that he’s gotten this far into that sinkhole.. (Hopefully this trip to Pomfrey’s will sort him out!) I did enjoy the banter between Draco and Harry, and was, I’ll be honest, really confused by it at first. It just didn’t make sense…but now I think I get it, so, no worries! It was hilarious when Zabini was so distracted…oh geez… But then, as it usually goes with Harry, he got in waaay over his head and was just covered in Draco’s sticky niceness. Ick. ““And you believe that because you and I banished Voldemort, you are now entitled to special privileges?” he inquired, as though he really wanted to know. Well, saying it like that made him sound right daft, didn’t it?” -I love how Harry’s been going about the castle saying that he single-handedly defeated Voldie, just because his dad didn’t want Harry to make a big deal about the part that he played in it…but totally took it to the next level…which was WAAAAY too far. ““You have never enjoyed your fame,” Severus reminded him. “Well, why shouldn’t I enjoy it now?” Harry asked with a shrug. “I did not say you are not entitled to enjoy the attention, but not to the detriment of your relationships with those who care about you. I am concerned about you, Harry,” he added, stepping closer. The movement made Harry feel skittish and he quickly stepped away. His father stared at him, his eyes shining with surprise. “There isn’t anything to be concerned about,” Harry told him, recovering quickly to feel the shadow of pain from Severus’ flame; he didn’t acknowledge it, and then the flame was extinguished. “I’ll apologize to Remus, and I’ll spend loads of time with my friends.” Harry couldn’t quite still the sarcasm as it flowed from his tongue, and again he waited for a reprimand. It didn’t come.” -This was horrible to read, I’m telling you. Defiantly one of those “rip my heart out and squash it with the heel of your shoe while laughing manically” moments. How could Harry be so thick?! And Sev not reprimanding him shows just how cutting Harry’s words were…and that Sev had given up. I really hated seeing the Weasleys and professors sitting at their own table in the corner…and Harry not even being able to go and talk to them was harsh. But in the mood he is currently stuck in, he probably would have made himself out to be an even bigger arse. “And Mrs. Malfoy had even patted Harry’s hand in a maternal manner at one point when Draco was assuring him that he wouldn’t be bored in the least if he chose to simply join the ranks of the elite of wizarding society. It only took a look from Severus for Mrs. Malfoy to peel her tapered fingers from Harry’s skin. She looked rather pale during the remainder of dinner. And Dumbledore simply watched all of it with concern.” -I love these awkward moments, and cherish each one that you give me…but this was overshadowed by much deeper feelings. Harry’s uncomfortableness, for one, and Sev’s eternally deep love for his git of a son. Thirdly, how much Albus can screw up, on occasion…and how much he cares for Sev and Harry as well. “Harry felt his father’s stiffening frame beside him, as if he were worried Harry might actually consider it, and that’s when Harry finally realized that his dad had been almost completely silent the entire evening and even the flame had remained dormant against his storm. Purposely dimmed.” -I am seriously concerned about Sev here, just as much as Harry. I hope that the next chapter opens with Sev searching out a teary-eyed Remus, and letting off some steam…unless Remus and Nymphadora were gone for a more practical reason, like eloping, seeing as how their best man turned into a monster…Or, since you just dashed my hopes saying that they weren’t together…I have no idea… Oh, and I love Ginny’s uncanny ability to imitate Severus. He he!! “Ginny glared at up him. “You know perfectly well, Harry Snape, that you wouldn’t even be here if it hadn’t been for your father. And you didn’t say a word. You acted as though you did it all alone. Without any help from anyone…not Lupin, not Dumbledore, not Bill,” she scolded. “And even Ron and Hermione have noticed the way you’ve been so…so overly pleased with yourself.”” -Once again, Ginny strikes truth!! Love that girl! I really hope that Harry took something away from their conversation (or her scolding, which ever you want to call it) and gets lots of time to think on her words, and more importantly his own actions while he’s in the Hospital Wing. *crosses fingers* Unless this leads to Siri…and Voldie’s eyes…then he can stay a git for a little while longer. I really enjoyed Harry and Ginny’s cuddling too…it was adorable! They’re so great together, well, when Harry’s not being fawned over by random girls that would have never given him the light of day a few months before. Also I’m amazed that it’s only been two, count ‘em: one, two, days since Voldie’s defeat. Amazing. And I’ll bet my non-existent pay check that Harry didn’t take his father’s potion…which really scares me. And I have a feeling that they won’t be meeting with Lucius’ lawyer lady…huh? Heh, this long enough for ya? Glad to have you back and it’s glad to be back!
Author's Response: Well, there is definitely something wrong with him, but nope, Voldemort ripped his little soul piece out and there is none left in there... And you're right. These guys really DO need a holiday. :o) Thanks for the review.
great work, as always Author's Response: LOL Harry is being a big idiot, isn't he? You should definitely be concerned about our boy. I'm glad you enjoyed it, idiot Harry and all! :oP
I loved that Severus went to talk with Remus...I just can't get over how far those two have come! I smiled at Harry's and Draco's interactions, and Sev snapping off Narcissa about the money. I kept wondering what was up with Harry at the dinner. It's good that he realised he was in the wrong in the way he handled the classroom situation with Remus, but his behavior continued to be so...off, so 'not Harry'. I really am thinking that there is something seriously wrong with him, and your ending would seem to point towards that, too. I can't wait to see what's going to happen next. I'm very concerned about how Harry keeps spacing out, and then the awful screaming and he won't wake up? I hope the others can help him. Oh, and I loved Ginny. She was just perfect and knew exactly what to say and do. You go, girl! Author's Response: Yeah, Harry is certainly not himself. You'll have to wait and see why though. :oP I'm glad you enjoyed the many many emotions though. I love to write them. Severus and Remus have come far, though Severus still is not quite sure what to do about their friendship. It scares him, I think. And he wouldn't admit that Remus is actually his friend. LOL I really have fun with Draco and Harry. I love Giinny as well. Glad you enjoyed the chapter. thanks for letting me know. :o)
Author's Response: yep, Harry is burying too much and they'll have a lot to work out if Harry can wake up from his nightmare. Hee hee. And yeah, it was pretty clear that Harry would get it eventually. LOL
Author's Response: Well, they better or the story will be over. LOL
Author's Response: LOL I know, I am evil again. I love it though. Thanks for the review. :o)
Author's Response: LOL I am chuckling here. Black hole of despair... I do so love to twist you all around with la di da and then shove the angst down your throats. It's just fun. It wouldn't be LC without a bit of that. :oP And as for sinister plotlines...well, do you really expect anything else? :oP I'm so glad you enjoyed it and the long length especially. It's my longest chapter yet. YAY
Irritation (is that considered an emotion?) I felt Ron's when Harry kept getting sidetracked on his way to see Ginny in the Great Hall. Then Severus' when he listened to Remus' recounting of Harry's behavior in his class, Severus' again when Harry was *late* to class, Harry's irritation with his dad on getting called on his behavior with Remus, and Ron's irritation turned to full blown anger at the Gryffindor party with Harry's behavior at the dinner. And then I had the huge feelings of unease so many times. Can we start with the tagline of "alientation leads to destruction" for starters? The thread of unease through this entire chapter was so palpable. All the characters suffered from it at times from what I can tell, but it really stood out when Remus spoke to Severus (that image of him with his head in his hands was so sad to me). And the entire dinner and Harry's behavior made my skin crawl. It was SO not Harry to not mention his Dad or stand up to Scrimgeour. I just don't think it was merely being overwhelmed with the scenario either. Harry's realization of how he had treated his close relationships began to sink in finally and I wonder just what that had to do with the final scene in the chapter. But more on that momentarily. I really felt sad for Severus and Remus too at certain moments. For Remus in his classroom (as I said earlier) but for Severus too at the end of that dinner. When Harry could barely notice his flame and he was so distant from him. And when Severus told him to sleep in the tower...I thought that a bit odd. Was it just so he wouldn't have to come back from being up late? Or something more, as in he was so frustrated with Harry that he needed some distance? Let me not forget the good humor moments too. That whole exchange between Draco and Harry in potions class as they tried to top each other in niceness to the detriment of the other students watching was a riot. And then Severus telling Harry "enough" in his head made me laugh out loud. And while I don't think you meant it to be funny, I actually found Severus' very fast retort to Narcissa about not paying Harry for his testimony to be amusing too. I love Sev's snappy quick tempered retorts. I felt relief as Ginny FINALLY got through to Harry. With every pitiful excuse Harry was giving for his "not" bad behavior Ginny had the perfect comeback (and when she addressed him as "Harry Snape" that just made me smile - go get him girl!). But then Harry zoned out again, as Ginny quickly noticed and I didn't think that boded well and I was right. But I forgot as I got the is cute image of snuggly Ginny and Harry. I wondered at first in his current headspace he was going to push for more than that from Ginny and I did a huge sigh of relief that he did not. AND THEN YOU HAD TO STAB ME IN THE HEART WITH THAT EVIL CLIFFIE! Dang you woman! Is Harry's behavior and remorse tied together with this? That tagline would suggest so to me. And why the heck won't he wake up? And why didn't Remus and Tonks show up to the dinner? And DID Harry take that dreamless sleep potion his Dad told him to? I'll bet he didn't. I'm dying here. I know, I know...you typed your fingers to the bone to give us 10,000+ words and I beg for me. I can't help it. I need to know! *whimpers pitifully* So many people need hugs I haven't a clue who to dish one out to. Can I split one three ways? Remus needed one in the classroom, Sev needed one after the dinner, but Ginny deserves one getting through to Harry. Author's Response: Ginny should get a hug, and of course Harry is not that crazy, to push for something from Ginny I mean. That would just be icky. Hmmm...did I say Harry was crazy. That was definitely a slip of the fingers of keys. Yep. I'm glad you liked cute Harry and Ginny snuggling together. Ginny has a definite way with him. I think some others thought that perhaps she should have been angrier but I just really don't imagine her to be an angry person. She has loved Harry for years and is more concerned at this point about what's wrong with him than in finding fault. Besides there are plenty of other people to be angry with him right now and she could clearly see that angry wasn't getting through to him. Yes, I am evil. Back to Dark queen status, I supppose. *sigh* And, everything is tied together. Always! You'll have to wait and see about Remus and Tonnks, but I will tell you that while they were not at the dinner, neither were they together during that time. Evil, I know. I am tipping and tapping as fast as I can. I knew you wouldn't be satisfied. LOL I really enjoy writing the Malfosy, especially draco and Harry together. I love narcissa as well, as you know. Still my kindred spirit, that one. Anyone else who does a double take at that...I am smirking at you. :oP Let's examine this carefully now...would Severus really tell Harry point blank to sleep in the tower? I very much doubt Severus could ever be so frustrated as to send his son away. Send his son away?! He JUST almost lost him for the second time. *innocent smile* Remus is definitely in need of a hug as well. There is much, much more going on with him than meets the eye. Everyone is irritated in this chapter at some point, except perhaps Remus who is just sad. And the tagline applies to more than just Harry.... I will continue typing and Hey, I didn't kill Tonks yet, so where's my blue-haired girl? :oP |
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