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Title: Chapter 8: Black 12 Jun 2008 5:06 pm
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed) [Report This]
    This chapter was so sad. Dang you. You had me all teared up--And with that and the throbbing of my punctured foot, well... LOL.

    Wanna know when I teared up? Do ya? I absolutely had to bite my lip over the scene where Harry was nursing and Severus wiped the drip of milk away from his mouth while Harry was chewing on his fist. So, so emotional and beautiful and I love how you write baby scenes. If I didn't know you were a Mama, I'd have guessed it from the way you write baby!Harry. It's bliss.

    Now, I know you won't kill Harry, but my God, I nearly swallowed my tongue when I read that Snape was taking him beyond the Veil. I hate that damn Veil...it's the most depressing thing ever in the history of HP. Of course, in your version, at least there's closure and the Veil serves a purpose.

    Oh, and Sirius....Sirius, Sirius. *shakes head* You actually write him accurately without over-doing it, I think. I like how Severus and Sirius have mutual disdain for each other rather than Sirius being the one to continually hate Severus while Severus has gotten over it and loves the world. lol.

    Hmmmm, 'Scuse me while I go search for some lines I loved...

    "From deep within the coma that Voldemort had inflicted, Harry cried out. Even unconscious, Harry could feel his mind being ripped from his father’s. And Severus’ body convulsed in violent harmony with his son’s reaction."

    **The oxymoron 'violent harmony' is just brilliant. I think I literally gasped when I read this, hearing the slow-motion "NOOOOO" going off in my head...

    "Severus’ knuckles were white as his fingers curled into Harry’s knees."

    **Here, you do a lovely job of 'showing' instead of 'telling'... And I know that's the corniest explanation of what you've *done*, but you have. You have!

    So now, here I sit, wanting to finish Chapter 31, but procrastinating like always. I was so glad to find one of your updates in my email this morning. It made me grin, knowing that I could put off my own writing for just a little bit longer. *cheers*

    A glorious chapter, Tabitha. Glorious.

    Author's Response:

    How is your foot by now, Jade?  Hope it's all better. 

    Tickles me that you liked the baby Harry scene so much.  Yep, that was a sweet moment...

    I had to do something with that stupid veil.  It's the weirdest thing out there in HP land.

    Oh Sev had in no way gotten over his hatred of Sirius.  It's even worse because he's also jealous of what he and Harry had.  Poor Sev. I'm glad you like my Sirius.  Tell me if I am getting him too wrong.  LOL

    Ooh, glad you liked that oxymoron.  That was fun imagery to write. 

    Thanks Jade!  YAY  I love that you enjoyed.  :o)

Title: Chapter 8: Black 12 Jun 2008 4:46 pm
Reviewer: ivys (Anonymous) [Report This]
    This is so good! Excellent job!!! I can't wait to see how will Sirius react to Sev, especially when he finds that he is Harry's father. I just adore your story. Have a nice day!

    Author's Response: Thanks Ivys!  I'm so glad you like the story so much.  YAY  More Sirius coming right up!  :o)
Title: Chapter 8: Black 12 Jun 2008 8:34 am
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    Very nice. I think it is obvious that Sirius was nto the angry phantom waving the icicle about on the other side, not if he could greet remus with such wholehearted and obvious affection. So it will be the three of them to the rescue.

    My heart bleeds for them all...Harry lying on the cold stone floor with Ginny holding his hand and DD snd Poppy keeping watch. And severus prepared to give up his life for his son...Remus too, I suppose as his life has taken such a down turn.

    Big question...when they have done their job, with Sirius's help, wiil Sirius be able to go back with them?

    Thanks Tabitha.

    ~Lesley~

    Author's Response:

    Well, well, well, Les...  You'll just have to wait and see about Sirius being able to go back with Remus and Severus.  *evil laughter* 

    It is a very dismal picture I've painted, isn't it?  But hey, I love the angst.  Thanks for reviewing and I am so happy you liked the chapter!  :o)

Title: Chapter 8: Black 12 Jun 2008 7:59 am
Reviewer: Leilia Snape (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow... That is all I can say about this story.
    I have read all of Lily's Charm, and every "mini-story" in this universe. Absolutely incredible.
    I have to tell you that I love this story, (I love all of these stories) and keep checking at least once a day to see if you have updated yet.
    And I have to tell you that you are going to kill one very loyal reader with all of this suspense.
    Now to the actual review. ;-}

    I loved how this chapter turned out!
    I can't wait to find out what Sev and Remus have up their sleeves. Are they going to try to bring Sirius back to life? I am looking forward to Sirius's reaction to finding out that Sev is Harry's father. Should be interesting. ;-}
    What happened between Remus and Tonks?! They were so happy together. Tonks was overjoyed that Remus Finally proposed, and Remus was just about jumping up and down earlier. but now Remus always seems sad. and that line that said (when) "Tonks had still wanted him". Did I miss something or was it not in there or am I just really dense?!

    Leilia

    Author's Response:

    LOL No, you didn't miss anything.  I just love to give snippets that don't tell the whole story.  Annoying, I know.  You'll learn about Remus and Tonks later.  Patience, dear grasshopper.  And I am so glad you found LC and are enjoying it so much.  :o)  I love to hear it!  And I know, my suspense is killer, but that's me.  I just love to leave you all begging for more.  More fun for me that way.  LOL  Oh yeah, you'll have to wait and see about Sirius as well.  ;o)


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