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Reviews For Magic, Interrupted.
Author's Response: Not yet ;)
I loved this line: Dudley must be starving. Harry actually was, but no one spared a thought. You should ask on the Potions and Snitches yahoo group for a beta reader to help with your writing since I am guessing you have to write this in English which is not your native language? You are doing a great job, but the phrasing (sentences) is a little awkward and makes it hard to read. Maybe another reader to help you could figure out what could be fixed. I like this start! It is very spooky and interesting. |
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