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Title: TRAPPED 23 Jun 2008 10:09 pm
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh no! Let Harry out, I demand it! Lol, :) Poor Harry. Wonder where this is going....

    Author's Response: Not yet ;)
Title: TRAPPED 05 May 2008 8:36 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow!!!! This is scary!!! Great plot and good set up. I think that you need to add more decriptions. I think that more descriptions of people, and the setting would make it better.

    I loved this line: Dudley must be starving. Harry actually was, but no one spared a thought.

    You should ask on the Potions and Snitches yahoo group for a beta reader to help with your writing since I am guessing you have to write this in English which is not your native language? You are doing a great job, but the phrasing (sentences) is a little awkward and makes it hard to read. Maybe another reader to help you could figure out what could be fixed.

    I like this start! It is very spooky and interesting.

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