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Title: ENLIGHTENED 18 Oct 2008 8:48 am
Reviewer: KimSpiritTalks (Signed) [Report This]
    This story just fills a spot in me that's been hollow for a long time. I know there are a gazillion "Snape and Harry reconcile" stories but this one is very different and it renews my memories of the books and how things happened and how wrong it all was. The absolute worst part of all was that Snape never got to understand much about who Harry really was or what his life was like. You're bringing a very believable Snape into close contact with Harry and given them realistic reactions to each others pain. Your story is really very good.

    Author's Response: I am always glad to fill hollow holes :D Thanks for your review, it's very encouraging.
Title: ENLIGHTENED 18 Oct 2008 7:28 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Awesome. I love how Snape yelled at Harry, "Don't you dare" about cleaning up after him. I would have liked him to continue that same train of thought after he came back, but it was a good, tense moment. Snape's reasoning is disturbing, and I wonder if he threw up because he was sick, because the thought was disturbing, or if he thought of something related, like that HE, Snape, had beeen used the same way as Harry, maybe, having Dumbledore be the only one he could look up to.

    I found the fact that Harry was so good at medicine a little out of character, since that background wasn't established in the books, nor in this story quite enough, but I really enjoyed the reverse healing, with Harry taking care of Snape. lovely.

    One part in that that needs to be fixed a little was when Harry came back to take care of Snape, and he was described as "Snape showed no reaction. His forehead was glistening with sweat." It wasn't really clear that Snape was passed out, or his eyes closed, or even lying down. Which made it a little odd that harry felt safe enough to try to take care of him, and was then startled when Snape opened his eyes. I think that was all.

    Congrats on getting a beta!

    I was a little sad about the fact that you changed the name of your story. "The Drill" was a really memorable title, and I would always be able to remember what the story was about because of the title. But I feel like the new title has been used before. It's the type that blends in with all the other title on the site. I would have personally renamed the story with the title of the insane asylum or something, but it's your choice. :)

    Thank you for the update! I am really enjoying the story.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you for your review. I fixed the two things, hopefully it makes more sense now. And I changed the title because originally, the would have drilled themselves out of there, Snape would obliviate Harry and things would continue as in the books. Now, this is not going to happen, it will be my first long and AU story, hence the title. I googled it, couldn't find another story with the name and after watching Girl, Interrupted, I liked it, lol. But the old name did have some flair, you are right.

     

    Hmmmmpf. 


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