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Title: The Letter 28 Apr 2008 10:24 am
Reviewer: Malora (Signed) [Report This]
    Interesting that with only 100 words available to you, you chose to use crossed-out ones. Great way to show Harry's indecision in a few words.

    As I've said, I haven't had a lot of exposure to Severitus, so I don't know if this is obvious or simply laid bare by your prose: Severitus is really about puberty, isn't it? Looking into the mirror and seeing an ugly stranger. Going through physical changes you hate. Not feeling right in your own body. People treating you differently. A parent eyeing you with distrust.

    I mean, it's also obviously a father-son story, but it's interesting to view it from another angle.

    I'm confused over why he wishes he never wrote the letter. Fear of punishment? Or fear of Sirius's reaction?

    Minor correction: "He look into the mirror" should be "He looks"

    Author's Response: Poor Harry wrote the letter when it was just his eyes that were different. By the end of the week he's got a much better idea of what's happening to him. I tried it a couple of different ways but in 100 words this is all I could fit. I figured the Severitus plot is so standardized people would get it. LOL

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