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Reviews For Your Basic Nightmare
I'm confused again about Harry's reaction, though. Is he crying with relief at being rescued? Or upset at Sirius's reaction? You're doing a great job of centering each drabble around only one plot point, but you may want to focus more on centering each drabble around one emotional point. Like: one thing happens, and Harry feels one thing, or reacts in one way (maybe in an unexpected way to give a bit of a twist). I realize that you'll soon be done with this story, as you're blazing right through it, but maybe for future drabble chapters? Regardless, kudos for executing a wonderful idea in a skilled way. Author's Response: Sirius always blows up. It's part of the Severitus experience. :-D I tried to fix The Letter, by the way, so it's clearer. I'll see what I can do about this one, too. He's crying because Sirius hates him now. Oh, the angst. Although, he is kind of half dead, so it's very possible he's relieved at being rescued. |
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