I started reading this fic on ff.net and am rereading to get back to where I was and track it here, since I rather prefer this site. Anyhow, I obviously like this story a great deal so far, but would strongly suggest you think about geting a beta to help you smooth out the grammar and punctuation a bit (You have a lot of run-on sentences and some problems with subject/verb agreement, for starters). I think it could be quite a fantastic story were you to smooth these details out. :-)
Hi, not sure if I've read your story before, because I've not belonged to the sight for all that long, but I like what I've read so far!
Nice work, and I'm interested to see which House Harry ends up in. I'll read it either way. It's your story be as creative as you ike.
I don't see why people should bother you about the changes you're making. That's what makes it YOUR story and not JKR's, for goodness' sake. Can you say 'fanfic', anyone? duh.
You just keep writing and don't take any flak from anyone's misguided ideas that canon is the only way for this to go. SS went back to CHANGE the past, not relive it.
I really like where you have gone with this so far. I haven't read the original version, so I am going to just have this version to comment upon. sounds like SS has learned some important lessons about Harry and how to be a better man this time around.
Author's Response: The changes I'm making are mostly correcting grammer, spelling, and continuiting errors with in the "Snape's Second Chance" universe.
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