I have to laugh at Ron & Hermione, sometimes they crack me up! Sev, a pedophile, oh my good God! And I thought it was sweet, how he held Harry. And I like the way you had the twins sorted into two different Houses, it's different.
| Title: New Faces
| 19 Jun 2008 3:22 am
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| Reviewer: SnapesYukuai (Anonymous)
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Hmm, if Harry hears this certain giggle I suspect Lily has something to do woth it. Now I'm even more thrilled to learn what's going on with them.
By the way, (I forgot to metion it in my last review) I like the fact that Sev and Remus are getting on better as it seems.
Well, bye, your Melfis.
I really enjoyed this chapter, too! Of course Ron and Hermione would be staggered by the way Severus held Harry...I wonder how they'll take it when the truth comes out?
All the kids seem so believable, and their interactions are fun to read. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad the characters are believable. That's really g,reat to hear. Well, all the kids will know the truth soon, and well....I can't tell you their reactions. But they'll be fun to write, and hopefully fun to read. Thanks so much for the great review. You're awesome. -Elise
Great chapter Elise, third year was probably my favorite. I'm glad to see you writing a story in that year, :) I may have found a mistake: "Ow!" he yelled in mock anger, and the subject of Snape was forgotten Mr. Weasley and Ms. Granger. This sentence seems fine until you said Mr. Weasley and Ms. Granger, I'm not sure why that's there. She smiled at himand he gave her a lopsided grin back. You need a space between him and and, :) nothing big dear. I spelt Slytherin wrong in a entire chapter, I am supposed to be a fan and I don't even know how to spell Slytherin! Tsk, tsk. Great chappie, so Snape and Remus are friends in this story? I don't think your characters are Mary Sues but then I have only seen a little of them. :)
Scorpia
Author's Response: Thanks Scorpia! I know, third year's def. my favorite. Thanks so much for correcting my mistakes! I'll fix it soon, I'll probably go back and do a rewrite once I'm finished. And thanks for saying they're not Mary-Sues. :) I'll probably have a few chapters (maybe 3 or more) out this weekend, since it is a weekend. Well, thanks again!
Love ya!
-Elise
Elise! I'm loving this! Your Hermione is the best. lol. Can't wait to see where you take this :) Awesome job, lady.
Author's Response: Aaw, thanks Jade! Hehe, it feels so weird to have you reviewing a story of mine, since I'm in awe of your amazing stories. And thanks, I had so much fun writing Mione. She's one of my favorite characters, and I hope I keep her IC. Thanks so so much for your review. You are the greatest. Kisses and Coffee to you!
-Elise
Hmmmmm I wonder who the mysterious girls are? You have me sitting on the edge of my seat waiting patiently for the story to continue. It is so intriguing. I love the kinder side of Snape towards Harry. I wonder is he going to find out about Harry's home life? I sure hope so and does something about it. Keep up the great job.
Author's Response: Oh, wow, I'm so glad to hear that I've got you on the edge of your seat. That's a BIG compliment, thanks so much! And, wellllllllll..........you'll find out about Arynn and Elisabeth soon. I promise. :) And yes, Snape will find out. And boy will he do something about it! (I will not tell you anything more though. I've said too much already.) lol. Thanks so much for your sweet review. You're THE BEST. -Elise
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