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Title: In the Lair of the Snakes... 05 Jul 2008 3:56 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    I Like him this way, he should be more personable and also it makes sense that he would take the abused children, for he would know best how to deal with them. But what is going on with the twins? Are they having some kind of channeling experience ?
Title: In the Lair of the Snakes... 19 Jun 2008 3:51 am
Reviewer: SnapesYukuai (Anonymous) [Report This]
    You've drawn a very amazing, adoring picture of Slytherin house there... I LOVE it!! ^___^ Nobody shall say our dear Potions Master isn't a caring head of house. You made me most curious about the alligeances of the parted twins. I can't decide if I should be suspicious or if I should trust the fact that Harry heard the "giggle" and that it can't mean anything bad if Lily is really involved in this.
    Your happy reader, Melfis.
Title: In the Lair of the Snakes... 30 May 2008 6:54 pm
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    I loved this chapter, and you have nothing to apologise for. It's important to establish character and scenes like, with the detailed interactions, make everything seem more real.

    I loved seeing Severus' thoughts on the students and his responsibilities towards them, the way he welcomed the first years and put them at ease, and how he established that they must stick together and that blood status has no place in their House.

    Great chapter, and I can't wait for him and Harry to have these little meetings with the twins!

    Author's Response:

    *Squeels and dances around in a circle*

    I'm SO glad you like it! I was afraid you wouldn't. Thanks so much, you're awesome!

    And the meeting with the twins is coming up soon, promise.

    Thanks so much! :)

    -Elise

Title: In the Lair of the Snakes... 27 May 2008 3:16 am
Reviewer: writeurlife (Signed) [Report This]
    the ooc sev is okay for the most part- like the train ride was good in the beginning- but the whole happy-go-lucky intro was kind of cheesy. other than that, however, i like the story. the twins meeting harry and snape is kind of cool. like a twist or whatever. anyway, i hope you update soon because although this chapter wasn't my fav, in general it's really quite good

    Author's Response:

    Thanks. I'll probably do a rewrite when I'm finished, so I'll take into consideration what you said. I'm glad you think my story is good, that's really great to hear.

    Hopefully you'll like the next chapter better. (So far there will be a Potions lesson and a chat with Remus, but I'll probably write more stuff in, like the first appearance of Draco.) :)

    Well, thanks for the review!

    -Elise

Title: In the Lair of the Snakes... 27 May 2008 12:03 am
Reviewer: Elfwyn (Anonymous) [Report This]
    To me what Snape said about Gryffindor's even in jest is not right. Little kids, will take the first thing said to them by an authority figure, especially a nice one, and ignore anything else afterwards. First impressions and all that. Those kids will walk away with the impression to hex Gryffindors and that Potters' are bullies. Hell, he is telling things to them that Harry doesn't even know. And he is the biggest bully of them all with his attitude to the rest of the school. Also if the hat was to put all abused kids in slytherin why did it not put Harry there not matter what Harry wanted? Aside from that you need a beta, there are spelling and grammar errors that take away from your story.

    Author's Response:

    Hey, thanks. I understand your points, and I'll think about them. The hat didn't put Harry in Slytherin because the child was desperate, and a desperate, emotional child can carry a lot of magical power (atleast in my universe.)

    And Severus has an agreement with the prefects to tell the children that he did not mean what he said. Now, obviously, there will probably be some complications, and those will be written in.

    And I'd appreciate it if you didn't curse in your reviews, if you review this anymore, thanks.

    And I know I need a beta, I'll think about trying to find one.

    Well, thanks.

    -Elise

Title: In the Lair of the Snakes... 25 May 2008 9:34 pm
Reviewer: Cecilia Farrell (Signed) [Report This]
    The way that you've portrayed Snape here as the head of house reminds me a lot of how other authors have portrayed him. However there is always the danger of slipping OOC, especially as JKR doesn't show us in the books how Snape interacts with his #snakes#. I'm not sure that Snape would act this way, particulary laughing openly, and hugging students and the like. I always thought Snape would be the type to instill values of pride and integrity into his Snakes, probably as a practical measure to prevent his house turning into a pit of vibers. But i've never seen him as an overtly tactile or emotional person, he'd rather keep an eye on them or hint that they can speak to him, but never be blantly sentimental or openly show his softer emotions, the blokes a spy!
    However i can see what your doing in setting up and establishing the character so you have a particular 'Snape' interacting with Harry later.
    I'm always very wary of the whole 'exchange student from America' idea as it changes the whole pathos of the school, but your doing well so far. :) Working like a plot bunny ten to the dozen, lol. Keep up the good work.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for the review, Cecilia. I'm glad you think I'm doing well on the 'student exchange' thing. :)

    And, yeah, I am trying to get a particular Snape going her. I'm trying not to fall into the trap of 'Oh, he's an evil snarky git, but he finds out he has a son and then he's all nice!'

    People don't change their spots overnight, so I'm trying to show that he isn't always evil. *ducks flying jars of frog tongues thrown at her by Sevvy-poo* lol.

    Thanks so much for the review, Cecilia. You're the greatest!

    -Elise

Title: In the Lair of the Snakes... 25 May 2008 6:56 pm
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    I like the twins and foresee much mischief in both houses.

    I could see Severus treating his "snakes" like this. With the house prejudice against Slytherin, someone has to take care of them.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks! I'm glad you think my portrayal of Sev is right. I was a little worried about it, but everyone seems to like it. And yes, mischief will abound! lol. I'm glad you like the twins, they're fun to write.

    Thanks so much for your review!

    -Elise

Title: In the Lair of the Snakes... 24 May 2008 7:24 pm
Reviewer: Devilishlycute (Signed) [Report This]
    Awesome. I always thought Severus would act differently around his lil snakes then he does around everyone else. Your protrayal of Severus is exaxtly how I thought he would act when with his lil snakes. Great going!!!!!

    Author's Response:

    Oh, wow, thank you so much! I'm so glad that I got Severus right. I always thought that the Slytherins were a very close bunch. Thanks so much for your awesome review, I am grinning so much right now! I'm so relieved that someone liked my portrayal of Sev. Thanks SO much, you're amazing!

    -Elise

Title: In the Lair of the Snakes... 24 May 2008 6:47 am
Reviewer: Keats (Anonymous) [Report This]
    They’re guardian angels sent to get father and son together or they’re from the future? Hmm you have me intrigued... looking forward to next chapter

    Author's Response:

    Hmm, good guess....you'll just have to wait and see! :) (I'm cruel, aren't I?)

    I'm glad you're intrigued, and the next chapter (maybe the next 3 or 4 chapters) should be up over the weekend.

    Thanks for the review! :)

    -Elise


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