This is fabulous. I feel like I'm reading JKR's work, as everyone is perfectly in character. I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! There's always that one character that can be tricky to write. Dumbledore in my case. I had a more difficult time with him, so I'm delighted you think I wrote him well. :)
Nice set up to a story I anticipate eagerly after this first chapter. The writing is smooth and flows without errors or clunky sentences--which is a real blessing.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I love fan fiction, but especially in the HP category over on ff.net I get tired of dumpster diving to find a few gems. I am an ex-English major, so I like to think my writing is pretty decent. Of course, writing well and telling a story well are two very different things, aren't they? :P Glad you like the way this one is going. It's only going to be five chapters total. My first fan fiction (which is Star Wars) is currently two years and 420 single-space pages long, and it's nowhere near done, so you can see why I'm proud of myself for managing to write a coherent short story. :)
| Title: Of Gurdyroots and Bracelets
| 09 Jun 2008 7:04 am
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| Reviewer: theKing (Anonymous)
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You definitely have my attention. I hope you update soon. This chapter seems interesting. You wrote the dialogue for the characters really well (like the way it flowed, the characterizations and the lack of cheezy, unfunny lines). And the introduction was entertaining.
Update again!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm happy you liked the dialogue, because there's nothing I hate worse than bad dialogue. Except for bad grammar. And bad spelling. Ex-English major, what can I say? Anyway, thanks for reviewing me. :)
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