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Title: Lily's Letters 25 Dec 2008 7:36 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, this is getting juicy now. I really like that you put it out in the open that Hayden was not originally part of the family. I wonder what he'll think of it--he won't forget, that's for sure.

    I'm not sure if you mentioned how old the boys were in this chapter, though you might have and I just missed it. I was really happy that Severus read the letter though because it's like he remembers how to read well, whereas Harry would not know how to and would have to sound things out and such. I wonder if Harry realizes that Sev can do that and he cannot...

    Great chapter!

    -P.G.
Title: Lily's Letters 25 Jul 2008 7:14 am
Reviewer: Munchkin (Signed) [Report This]
    I like this story very much. This is a 'What If?' I've never seen before. I have one question, after 'Hayden' turns eighteen, will he become twenty-one, the age he was de-aged at, or thrity-eight, the age he's supposed to be? Also, there is a few spelling mistakes in your story. The first I saw is in the first chapter, where it says beautiful even death, I assume there is supposed to be an 'in' in there. The second I saw is a missed comma in between nervous and hyper in this chapter.
    Anyway, sorry about that but I tend to correct spelling and punctuation in stories in my head, whether I want to or not.
    Please update soon!

    Author's Response:

    Hi, thanks for the feedback btw. To answer you question;

    Hayden will be his true age. One of the reason Dumbldore didn't want to use it was becuase the instant re-ageing puts alot of pressure on the body and a man his age could die from that. I'll go over that more later in an other chapter. 

    Thank you for your crique, I'll fix it ASAP.

    Jen. 

Title: Lily's Letters 12 Jul 2008 8:40 am
Reviewer: celestialuna (Signed) [Report This]
    good chapter.
Title: Lily's Letters 11 Jul 2008 11:19 pm
Reviewer: jflame (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Wow! Tension anyone? Fab work Jennifer, im on baited hook for the next chap.
Title: Lily's Letters 11 Jul 2008 11:14 pm
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    Good, they are out of there. But, bad - "Hayden" is really going to get upset.

    I wonder where they went?

    Are "Hayden's" headache an indication that Severus is trying to remember

    It looks like lily was trying to make peace. Also, the letters and the pictures, hidden under the bed, shows that Petunia really did want a part of her sister with her.

    Author's Response:

    Hiya,

    Hayden's headaches are Severus trying to break through the block. You have to remember Hayden and Severus are pretty much different people with slightly different personalities.

    Lily was trying to make peace, the war was scaring her and she wanted to get on a good footing with her sister incase she died, with good reason. Petunia still resents Lilly but she does love her sister. She could not not love her, but that dosn't mean she had to like her. Petunia believes that the magic world stole Lily from her - like in myth faires steal babies. But there will be more of that later. 

    Thanks for your comments,

    Jen 


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