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Title: The Strangest Birthday Ever 20 May 2010 7:28 pm
Reviewer: akari chan (Anonymous) [Report This]
    i cant wait for chapter 4 if there will be
Title: The Strangest Birthday Ever 11 Jan 2009 6:18 am
Reviewer: studiohq (Signed) [Report This]
    This is Promising I must read on!

    Author's Response: very glad you think so
Title: The Strangest Birthday Ever 06 Sep 2008 3:22 am
Reviewer: dracosgoddess123 (Signed) [Report This]
    wat a fantastic chapter. i loved it and i really hope that the next chapter will be posted soon. 10/10 for this one! i am adding this story to my faves too

    Author's Response: thanks, I just have to finish typing chp. 3 then i can post it
Title: The Strangest Birthday Ever 01 Sep 2008 12:34 am
Reviewer: Huntresss (Signed) [Report This]
    this is quite excellent. I had read the beginning before but lost track of the story when i refound it last night. Keep up the good work.
    Is Harry ever going to come around and see Snape as more than the bad guy. I am pleased with your interaction between Him and Draco. He could really use a good friend.

    Author's Response: thank you for your review , i glad that you like the story chp.3 will be out soon hopefully
Title: The Strangest Birthday Ever 30 Aug 2008 4:02 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow, that was quite the long chapter! I like your story a lot, but there was so much to absorb in this chapter that it might have been easier if you made it into several chapters, such as the clothes store with Melissa & Declan as one or two and then the chapter with Eithan and maybe another with the panther familiar as well. You have some great ideas here and I really like them, but it'd be easier for people to read if you broke it up some. And there are a few spelling errors and punctuation too. I don't mean to be harsh, since I think this story could be excellent but it's best if you feed the reader in small doses, so they can get the full effect of all your wonderful ideas.

    Author's Response: thank you for the ideas, chp. 2 is so long because i had no idea where cut it off. chp. 3 will be a lot shorter hopefully if i don't get carried away again.
Title: The Strangest Birthday Ever 30 Aug 2008 2:48 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow, I love your story! Harry is SO Slytherin! The dymanics are great, and so funny!

    Nice long chapter too! I'm looking forward to see where you are going with this story.

    Author's Response: thank you for your review, I seem to like making Harry show his Slytherin side more
Title: The Strangest Birthday Ever 29 Aug 2008 11:00 pm
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    I really like sick or injured Harry stories, and when he's rebellious it makes a better story. :) This story has a lot of potential but the mistakes make it difficult to read, and I think that jars readers from the story so that they can;t enjoy it as much. Please watch for typos and capitalization. "I" should always be capitalized. If a person wears clothes, it is on their body, but a ware is a type of goods. "Muggle" should always be capitalized.

    Severus woke the next morning thinking about what he was going to to for the little trouble maker's birthday today. ' the boy needs a companion' he thought.' and maybe a new wardrobe, because all he wares is clothes that hang off him unless he wares his school uniform' he added in his head Severus got out of bed gather some clothes and headed into his bathroom to take a shower.

    Thoughts using ' is fine, but they must use the same punctuation as quotation marks, and all the same grammar. You are missing periods, and you are missing words. Things like "i" and "snape" are not capitalized. This really should not be. If you are having problems catching these things when you edit your story, then you need to find a beta reader to help correct your work for you. You can find one by posting a message on the Potions and Snitches yahoo group, and there are websites dedicated to beta services that I'm sure you can find if you search for them. Making the chapters shorter may help too, because then you wouldn't have as much to go through.

    Your story has a lot of great potential, and could be very enjoyable so please keep working on it, and don't give up! :) Your story could be very good.
Title: The Strangest Birthday Ever 29 Aug 2008 10:59 pm
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    I got a bit confused with Melissa. I take it that she is Snape full sister, that their father hide in the attic (due to some inheritance thing) and she somehow got out several years ago.

    The chapter was good but almost too long. I like long chapters but you put too much in one reading. It probably would have worked better as two chapters.

    Other than some spelling errors and the lenght, I am enjoying it. Harry needs to get over his snit and start trying to behave and get well

    Looking forward to more.

    Author's Response: sorry i confused you, yes Melissa is Severus full sister their father Tobias made her live in the attic because he did not want to acknowledge that he had a daughter, and refuse to let Eileen tell Severus that he had a sister , Melissa left Spinner's End at age 17 when Tobias had left for the day.

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