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Title: A Real Detention 06 Mar 2021 10:47 am
Reviewer: IHufflepuff (Signed) [Report This]
    I really liked the story so far, but I'm going to stop here.
    I can't stand reading child abuse that isn't seen as abuse in the story.
    From the other comments I figure washing a childs mouth with soap is normal in some country, probably the US, but it really isn't in others and seems inhumane to people from these countries. I study social work and we are taught that something like this is a big no-go, not to mention totally ineffective as a corrective measure.
    So, yeah. You write well, but maybe read up on the UN convention of the rights of the child?
Title: A Real Detention 28 May 2009 8:27 am
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Poor Harry, that taste must have been horrendous! He’ll defiantly watch his mouth from now on, though. This is a wonderful story! I love the dynamic between Harry and Severus having to keep up appearances in public but having a completely different relationship in reality. Because it’s already set up before Harry gets to Hogwarts, it’s different from any fic I’ve read so far. I also really liked the bit about forgiveness in this chapter! Keep up the marvelous work!

    Author's Response: Thank you! I really liked writing this one because it gave me a chance to shift back and forth from different POV's and perspectives, showing different sides of Severus.  I wanted it to be that way in the beginning, because then there wouldn't be any of the usual now I need to set aside differences and trust Snape bit. He already trusted Severus and Severus already wanted to guard and protect him and love him as well. Hope you enjoy the rest.
Title: A Real Detention 28 Sep 2008 7:06 am
Reviewer: Zarz (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Really great so far! It must be about time for Lucifer to break out his thermal underwear considering Harry's been claimed as son three times now - James, Severus, and God. That is one thing that Snape needs to remember when dealing with Harry, though; Harry's never had any experience with someone who punished him but still loved him.

    Author's Response: You're right and Seveus is going to figure that out.  Loved your comment too!
Title: A Real Detention 30 Aug 2008 9:52 pm
Reviewer: tabbycat (Signed) [Report This]
    The mouthwash thing was so cool!!! I *love* new things! Also, I thought the idea of Snape as a Christian (and a believable one at that) was really fantastic. (Also like all the previous chapters just thought reviewing each one to say I liked it was a bit much). Just a couple of questions...How come Harry didn't recognise Snape at the feast? And what are you going to do about Ron's opinion of Snape, I can see Harry nearing breaking point with his treatment of him.

    Author's Response: I love inventing new things, that's what I do in a lot of my stories.  Like in Heir To Prince Manor I made up Dragons Wild poker and shimmerlings and a time clock.  I've never thought that Sev didn't believe in God, despite his sarcasm.  They way he is portrayed in the movies kind of reminded me of a priest. Harry didn't recognize Snape at the feast because his glasses are bad and he couldn't see far enough up the hall to identify Severus's face.  Ron's opinion of Snape will get worse and it's going to start really bugging Harry.
Title: A Real Detention 23 Aug 2008 7:17 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    I'm caught between laughing at poor Harry and gagging. Tabasco sauce, ugh. That's what my aunt used on her twins when they bit each other, lol.

    Author's Response: And my niece does the same with her 3 year old son too! But he hasn't bitten anyone since, so it works. As harry learned unfortunately!
Title: A Real Detention 19 Aug 2008 6:57 am
Reviewer: slytherensangel26 (Signed) [Report This]
    great chapter!

    Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
Title: A Real Detention 17 Aug 2008 9:22 pm
Reviewer: Ash (Signed) [Report This]
    Whoa, whoa, religion warning. Well I enjoyed it so far, I just encountered your story and was reading it in one go. Snape was OOC and I doubt very much any child would have accepted so easily that an abusive situation was allowed to go on but it was a good read.

    I am quitting here though, as I have zero tolerance for religion inserted into fics, especially this kind of God saved us all, etc, etc, etc. The good thing about HP is that religion is not mentioned really, so there is such a thing as reader applicability - anyone can read it, no matter what they believe in. This majorly, majorly crossed that line. "Of course we believe in him" - "God" forbid there are people who a)don't believe or b) don't believe the same thing ah? Not very nice at all.

    Well it was good while it lasted so thanks for that.

    Author's Response:

    Sorry you feel that way, this was a different approach I was using here, and there was never any mention that other wizards can't believe in other religions, just that Severus was Christian.  He was refuting Petunia, not badmouthing other religious beliefs.  There will be mention made of other religions as Harry speaks with other wizards and witches who are not Christian and there is no disrespect intended here.  Severus simply is using religion to illustrate the point of forgiveness, which I think is a major concept of any religion.  It isn't as if I've made him a priest who goes around spouting Bible quotes.  You could always skip over the small bits of religion I've inserted, and there aren't all that many, the same way some people skip over CP parts in other stories, for this is mainly a fic centered around a father son relationship and the events in the Sorcerer's stone. 

    As for Snape not being in character, he's not like canon, because in this story he was in charge of Harry from the time he was four and always when the child was ill and sick and at his most vulnerable.  Snape does have a heart and is not evil, and after taking care of a child in that manner for years on end, I would think he would come to care and love Harry and be able to look past the fact that he was James's son.  Canon Snape never had that chance, he only saw Harry at school and it was easy to resent the boy who was favored by everyone and who broke rule after rule and was never punished for it. But this Harry Severus only sees as an abused neglected child, Lily's child, whom he has promised to take care of. Unless one has a heart of stone, it would impossible for anyone not to love poor Harry.

    However that is your choice and thank you for reviewing.   

Title: A Real Detention 17 Aug 2008 1:54 am
Reviewer: Serenity Snape (Signed) [Report This]
    I love that line about Jesus...my Youth For Christ Leader adored it as did I! Keep updating pwease!!!

    Author's Response: Thanks, I felt it was appropriate for Severus to use that example as a model of forgiveness.  I will be updating soon so long as everyone keeps reading!
Title: A Real Detention 15 Aug 2008 1:09 am
Reviewer: Jamie (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Wow another wonderful story I cannot stop reading. I love reading your stories where Severus is in some shape or form Harry's father.

    Author's Response: Thanks and I love writing them!
Title: A Real Detention 13 Aug 2008 5:25 pm
Reviewer: ReginaCaeli (Anonymous) [Report This]
    What a sweet wonderful chapter,I would fall in love with Snape if I wasn't already there,LOL

    Author's Response: Aww, see that's why I love writing Severus, because you can make people fall in love with him all over again.

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