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Title: A Real Detention 13 Aug 2008 6:17 am
Reviewer: b_e_skrewt (Signed) [Report This]
    ... is the last phrase - "worthless impudent whelp that he was" - supposed to refer to snape or to harry?

    a good chapter, although the little bit of preaching detracts from the characterization, in my opinion. jkr (and most fanfic) has consistently portrayed snape as sarcastic, intelligent, iconoclastic, and cynical, and iconoclasticism and cynicism don't usually coincide with devout professions of christian belief.

    but, it's your fic, and if you think you can can believably portray snape as a christian, go for it.

    Author's Response:

    That's Harry in the last line, he's thinking of himself as a worthless impudent whelp, undeserving of being a son to anyone. 

    I admit that it may seem odd to see Snape giving a lecture on forgiveness and bringing Christ into it, but he's not all he seems.  One facet is his cynicism and sarcastic side and the other part, the secret part, is the man who desires above all to be forgiven for the sins he committed in the past.  He might not go to church, but he believes firmly in the tenets of forgiveness and redemption, for he is a living example of them, Lily forgave him before she was killed, and asked him to watch over Harry and that made a huge difference, you'll learn more about that in a future chapter.

Title: A Real Detention 13 Aug 2008 6:06 am
Reviewer: Tsukinoko (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I really like how you've included Christianity as part of the wizarding world. Very few fics that I've read do that.

    Author's Response: Thanks, I try to make my fics different from the norm.
Title: A Real Detention 12 Aug 2008 3:05 pm
Reviewer: Mel (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Yay! You updated! I really liked Ron's little "talk" before the detention. And the way Severus said he will handle Malfoy too and how he brought Lily into it, that's good, showing Harry what king of person his mum is. And the "mouthwash"--poor Harry. But you can't deny it wasn't deserved. Loved the last part too. Slammin!

    Author's Response: Thanks.  I figured then was a good time to bring up Lily, and soon Severus and harry will have a long discussion about her, since Severus can now bear to talk about her and how her love changed him. 
Title: A Real Detention 12 Aug 2008 3:01 pm
Reviewer: DrSnape (Signed) [Report This]
    Great chapter. The punishment was fair and I think both Severus and Harry learned something. Love & forgiveness two of the most important things in the world! Love this story.

    Author's Response: I totally agree thanks!
Title: A Real Detention 12 Aug 2008 2:43 pm
Reviewer: Judy (Signed) [Report This]
    Aww! he called him son! Beautiful. I hope he'll say it to him when he can hear it next time. And there's nothing like tabasco to cure a nasty mouth, LOL! All my kids know that. Can't wait to see what's next.

    Author's Response: Well, you'll have to wait and see.  Tabasco sauce-ugh! There's some action up next!
Title: A Real Detention 12 Aug 2008 2:34 pm
Reviewer: burns603 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Brilliant! That mouthwash--ugh! Glad MY mom never thought of that one. And I loved the hug at the end too. Aww!

    Author's Response: Me too! LOL! Hugs are always good!
Title: A Real Detention 12 Aug 2008 2:30 pm
Reviewer: blackmagicwoman (Anonymous) [Report This]
    The opening scene btwn Harry & Ron was wonderful, I laughed at Ron touching Harry's arm to see if he was "real". This whole chapter was excellent. Sev was fair but not overly harsh and Harry has learned, hopefully, not to test him. And the forgiveness bit was wonderful too.

    Author's Response: Yup, Ron is quite a character.  Glad you found the punishment fair, I know some didn't, but oh well, it's my story.
Title: A Real Detention 12 Aug 2008 8:12 am
Reviewer: Keats (Signed) [Report This]
    The punishments were just and I love that Sev gave him a hug afterwards and told him he was forgiven. Very good love the father son relationship that is developing

    Author's Response: Severus here is behaving like a real dad would after punishing his child, though Harry doesn't realize it yet since he's never had a real dad.  Their relationship will continue to grow, though not without some more misunderstandings etc along the way. 
Title: A Real Detention 12 Aug 2008 4:12 am
Reviewer: CraftyMomChick (Signed) [Report This]
    Once again you have come up with a wonderful story. I particularly like the little lesson in forgiveness that Sev gives at the end of this chapter. Thanks for a good read and keep up the good work.

    Author's Response: You're very welcome.  I feel that forgiveness and redemption are good things for everyone to read about, that's why I love Severus, for he is the redeemed hero and shows that even if you screw up, you can always go and do the right thing and be forgiven.
Title: A Real Detention 12 Aug 2008 3:05 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh my God!!! Poor Harry!! That must have burned!! Yikes!!!

    Oh no, Draco again? Little troublemaker!!

    Better keep your temper Harry; God knows what Snape will do if you lose it again!!

    Author's Response: Yes it did burn a little like a hot pepper, but once he rinsed his mouth out, it stopped. And yes, draco strikes again.  Hopefully Harry will be able to control himself.

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