Title: Chapter 2
| 27 Aug 2020 9:20 pm
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Reviewer: Ann (Signed)
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It's a very serious and interesting beginning. Write it, please. Not forget it.
Title: Chapter 2
| 27 Aug 2020 9:19 pm
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Reviewer: Ann (Signed)
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It's a very serious and interesting beginning. Write it, please. Not forgive it.
Good luck with the Dursleys
It's refreshing to see a story of this type (sevitus) where Snape gets mad at Dumbledore. I've stopped reading a lot of stories after the first chapter or two because Dumbledore says 'I didn't tell you because I didn't think you could handle it after Lily's death.' And Snape just forgives him and they are all lovey dovey. I dont think its forgivable to take someones child away because they are grieving. A lot of people would be considered unfit parents if that were the case. Snape does not seem the sort to forgive such a thing or accept such a flimsey excuse. So I'm quite looking forward to reading more of this story.
Awesome story I hope you update soon! My only critique is that you need to respace the 2nd chapter because it is a little hard to read. But other than that I loved the story and the concept. So are we going to see Harry slowly changing physically or will it be fast? Will Dumbledore try to stop Severus from taking Harry home?
Please update!
To the earlier Reviewers: are you kidding me? Do you rate the story or the way it's formatted? Yes, the second chapter is harder to read then the first but not impossible! I've read it and I'm even not a native English speaker! Your reviews are really below the standard.
Back to the chapter: it's quite good although Severus is not himself there. Harry is better. I wonder how the visit to the Dursleys will go on. And I hope Snape will get the guardianship over his son. Don't worry with ratings of the second chapter, your story is quite good.
Its going really fast I'm not complaining I'm just saying..I do like it though...are your updates going to be frequent?
this is really good, but the second chapter is unreadale in its current state, it should be formatted the same as chapter1 and not as one continuous paragraph.
You know it's really hard to read in this shape...
This seems to be a good start, butthis second chapter is very hard to read...
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