OOh, I love Severitus stories!!
Great start. I'm looking forward to find out "how" Snape is Harry's father.
Title: Chapter 1
| 27 Mar 2009 10:39 am
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Reviewer: Heartstar (Anonymous)
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Nice Start I would really like to see more and how you will go from there.
Heartstar
Title: Chapter 1
| 14 Dec 2008 3:29 pm
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Reviewer: Muggle49 (Anonymous)
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Interesting start and good idea, hope to see how it develops and hope for longer chapters :)
Title: Chapter 1
| 07 Aug 2008 5:07 pm
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Reviewer: Mysterious Jedi (Anonymous)
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Intriguing start. I hope to see more soon. Can't get enough of those father/son fics.
Author's Response: Me either. I hope you like the next chapter. It'll be up soon.
great start. i can't wait for another chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks. I'll have another chapter up soon.
Title: Chapter 1
| 07 Aug 2008 4:29 am
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Reviewer: jolisgsd (Anonymous)
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Interesting start! I'm intrigued. What is Harry's birth certificate?
Author's Response: Uhh, I'm not sure what you are asking. His birth certificate is a record of his birth.
The summary grabbed my attention, I was a bit dissapointed though. It seems rather...lame that Harry would just be carrying that certificate or paper around at that time. If he REALLY wanted to hide it it would seem better if he had it somewhere no one would think to look. A book bag is NOT one of those places. I would suggest showing how it got left in Harry's bag, he was studying it and did not have time to put it back or something. His response to Snape finding out was very toned down when you would think Harry would be freaking out. The grammer is great but the characters seem a liitle bit out of whack, lol. I think it could be great after you fixed those problems. Maybe longer chapters? I hope I don't come across to harsh, this is just my honest opionion and you can dismiss it if you like.
Author's Response: I will explain why he was just carrying it around. Its in the next chapter, I'm pretty sure. And he is freaking out, on the inside. He can't just start screaming or something. He doesn't know what to do. And the other chapters are a lot longer. It just seemed like a good place to break, even though it was pretty short. The next chapter will explain more.
very short chapter, to short in my opinion but hopefully the next one will be longer, other than that a good start
Author's Response: I know it was really short, but it made the most sense to stop there. Don't worry, that is by far the shortest chapter in the whole story.
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