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Title: Bonds Strengthened 13 Aug 2008 3:50 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    That was great. I liked the way the twins teased Ron but agreed not to prank Sel or her friends. And the bonding moment between the four friends was excellent.

    So was the last part with Sev and Sel alone. I think it was good that he told her he wasn't mad at her and that he was afraid she would get hurt. The hug was wonderful. Little girls need a lot of hugs. And of course Severus would love Lily's daughter.

    Some minor corrections:

    "label" should be used instead of "lable"

    "pity" only has one t in it.

    "Sel would beat you to it" is how that should read. :)

    Author's Response: Thank you! I was worried I had put the hug scene in too soon. And again, a BIG thank you for the corrections!
Title: A New Friend for Sel 13 Aug 2008 3:39 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Great chapter here. I loved it when Sel saved Ron. And got awarded points for it too. She's just full of surprises, isn't she?

    Author's Response:

    Thank you! You can expect more surprises in this story, and possible the series.

    Nightshade :)

Title: Friends, Enemies, and Trust 11 Aug 2008 1:54 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Great job here! I really like the way Sev and Selene's realtionship is starting to develop.

    The hot chocolate was soo cute!

    Here are some spelling/punctuation errors I noticed. These should read:

    "Or else what, Weasel?"

    Ron stayed silent.

    Smirking, Zacharias said. "That's what I thought

    Zacharias Steel, third year Gryffindor, was a known bully and even students in higher years avoided him. There was no doubt in anyone's mind

    He's going to make your life hell now, you know?"

    Sel nodded and stood. "I'll see you guys later."

    Hermione Granger stood and handed Sel a piece of parchment. "This is the password, in case you forget."


    the school's healer."

    that her family had always yelled

    'Why am I lying to him?'

    'painful' instead of 'painfull'

    "since" instead of "sence"

    "two cups" not "too"

    "as well as coffee"

    Until

    "Ron was wrong. You're not mean."

    Don't be surprised if it is sooner . . .

    I think I caught them all. :)

    Author's Response:

    Thank you! Thank you very much for telling me the errors I missed. At the moment I'm working on the next chapter but as soon as I'm done I'll fix it. Though it may have to be tommorow, cause at the moment I'm at my grams. Again, thank you for the review and for telling me the errors.

    Nightshade:)

Title: Chapter 3 09 Aug 2008 5:27 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    That was great. I like how Severus dealt with them and I hope he doesn't terrify Sel too much with her detention.

    One minor point, I noticed a few spelling errors. You used "latter" instead of "later" and "grieve" instead of "grief". Just thought you might want to know. ;) I'm a former English teacher, so I'm correcting things as I read, force of habit.

    Update soon!

    Author's Response: Thank you! I didn't even notice the errors, thank you for bringing them to my attention. Spelling and grammer aren't my best traits, which is sad seeing as I love to write. If you don't mind, in future chapters if you notice any errors could you just tell me please. I can then fix it. Thank you again for reviewing and bringing those errors to my attention. Hope you enjoy the rest of the story! :)
Title: Friends, Powers, and Attacks 09 Aug 2008 5:22 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Loved it! Sel has very cool powers and I hope she pulverizes Mimi. She's an evil little prig. I wonder what Sev's idea is?

    Author's Response: Thank you! Don't worry, Sel will have her chance to pulverize Mimi.
Title: Selene Lily Potter 09 Aug 2008 5:18 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    This is a very good beginning. I like the idea of a nice Draco. And poor Sev, he was in such shock. I hope Sel comes to trust him.

    Author's Response: Thank you!
Title: Chapter 3 09 Aug 2008 1:47 am
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    I just started this and I guess I missed something. I am taking it that there was no Harry - there was Selene.

    I am looking forward to the Snape and Selene conversation.

    Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, you are right there is no Harry only Selene.
Title: Friends, Powers, and Attacks 08 Aug 2008 3:38 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    I saw about four errors, nothing major....And this fast update was wonderful! I just wish there were more girl harry stories and that it had more fans. Thank you for explaining after I asked you those questions, :)
    I plan to keep reading and reviewing, this is a great story idea! LOVE that the Malfoy's are good and that the mean girl is named Mimi, (the name makes me shiver), lol. Severus is coming up! I'm excited, Sel's powers are cool. I think she may have given them away a little too quickly. Then again, she's never had real friends before and kids show off some times to try and impress oithers. Even though I don't think Sel was trying to do that. I hope to read more soon!

    Author's Response:

    Thank you! You're not alone, I wish more people would write girl harry stories too. Hopefully people will. Oh well. You're welcome to ask any questions. I don't mind. I do find it slightly funny though that people find the name Mimi creepy. I picked that name for three reasons; one it's my nieghbors cat's name. The name kind of had a nice ring to it. And also it kind of, IMO, goes against her nature. Mimi is Evil, the name is kind of sweet. LOL!

    Again thank you for reviewing and I hope you like the rest of the story!

    Nightshade:)

Title: Selene Lily Potter 07 Aug 2008 5:01 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    Aww, I see romance between Sel and Draco, how cute! I do wonder how Mrs. Figgs nephew would know what Lily looked like. Is he a wizard? Why would he care about Sel's mother's looks? Other then that, I liked it. It's hard to find a good 'Harry's a girl story' this looks like it could be great.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you! Yes I agree with you; it is hard to find a good Harry's a girl story. As for Mrs. Figgs nephew; No he is not a wizard. Like Mrs. Figg he is a squib. And it wasn't really like he cared about Lily's looks...  

    (Spoiler Warning!) 

    Mrs. Figg was friends with Lily, Bert got to know her through his aunt. There was not romance or anything, just friends. After Sel was placed with the Dursley's he moved in with his aunt and befriended Lily's daughter. He and Mrs. Figg know the Dursley's are mean, so when ever they can they help Selene cope. He told Sel she looked like her mother because Sel really wanted to know what she looked like, and she had never seen a picture of Lily or James.

    Thanks again for reviewing, and I hope that cleared things up.

Title: Selene Lily Potter 07 Aug 2008 1:29 am
Reviewer: projectjay (Anonymous) [Report This]
    very cute what is this challenge? Is he going to be nice or mean to selene?

    Author's Response: Thank you! The challenge is mini Lily. Basically instead of looking like James the 'Harry Potter' will look like Lily, or be a girl. As for Snape being mean or nice; you'll have to wait and see.

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