I sincerely hope Dumbledore didn't know about this ahead of time--that's just obscene, if he did and didn't do anything about it. I really like that Snape has chosen to take Harry under his wing and care for him. Having been an abused child himself, I think he really would like to see this child make some sort of recovery and will hopefully have the patience to do so.
My one criticism is that I don't think Severus was shocked enough when he saw Harry for the first time. Something like this is not an everyday case of abuse and I think Sev would have been a lot more shocked than you portrayed him.
Other than that, I like where this is going. It's a very good read.
-P.G.
Yes, Dumbledore's clever enough for that. But his plotting really sets my teeth on edge. Hope Severus can handle Harry, the poor thing. The Dursleys need to be locked in a cage or something. With wild beasts.
There is a special level of HELL reserved for people like Vernon and Petunia...I am happy that you had Dudley questioning Sev on Harry and the boy for himself showed some understanding and had a heart indicating that even though Dudley was spoilt there is a lot of good in the boy I hope that Sev (Albus or the wizarding world) have the two despicable adults arrested and that Dudley could go to a decent home where he could grow up to be a respectable young man.
Poor Harry what was his aunt thinking what kind of heart or lack thereof does one have to cage a child like that, even if you think the child evil you would send them to a priest or something ... it would have been better if they had left him at an orphanage
Author's Response: The Dursley's punishment is one I haven't contemplated yet. I do know what happens to Dudley, but it may or may not set well with you. I can't help that, really. It makes a sort of sense in my story.
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