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Title: Chapter 3 11 May 2009 9:30 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Very interesting. I especially like that Severus had to think to make the connection about the word "bad" and will now come to figure out what words Harry knows, based on what he's heard from the Muggles.

    I do have to criticize a few things that Harry has done in this chapter though. I am personally surprised that Harry would know that the ball was a toy. It is my assumption that Harry has not left his cage and it became obvious that Dudley didn't know about Harry, so how would Harry know what the ball was if he had never seen anyone play with one?

    This same question goes for him drinking out of the vile--has Harry drank out of a cup before, or has Petunia given him water in a bowl like an animal? Would he know what to do with it if it was in a vile?

    Do you see what I mean? I'm not trying to be mean or rude with this review, but I just think that more thought needs to go into some of these scenarios (and maybe it does in further chapters, I'll have to see). But I mean, if Harry's never been out of his cage, would he really know how to walk? Would his legs be strong enough to hold him up? I just really think these things need to be taken into consideration.

    On the plus side, I do like how patient Sev is being with Harry and how he's using every trick in his teaching book to try and get Harry to do what he needs him to do. I think there is some hope for him yet.

    -P.G.
Title: Chapter 3 27 Jan 2009 3:44 am
Reviewer: Tekky (Anonymous) [Report This]
    damn... my friend sent me the link to this fanfic (she made it), and I must say for being a harry potter fanfic (Not the biggest HP fan, or a fanfic fan) it actually kept my attention, and was very interesting. I plan on waiting for more updates, but to catch my attention this must be a top quality HP fanfic.
Title: Chapter 3 04 Sep 2008 11:28 pm
Reviewer: angelauthor14 (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow I loved it! I really hope you update soon, you capture Severus and Harry's feelings really well.
Title: Chapter 3 03 Sep 2008 3:38 am
Reviewer: roguegambit (Signed) [Report This]
    Interesting plot. I don't think I've read one quite like this before. I'm enjoying it and can't wait for your next update.
Title: Chapter 3 18 Aug 2008 6:08 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    That was very clever of Sev, to figure out what was causing Harry to cry. Then again, Severus is really smart and all. The part with the ball and the potions was excellent, I love Severus for being so patient with Harry. And the last part was very cute. Aww!

    I did find one other typo in here, up at the beginning when you say he is a reformed Death Eater it should be "that" not "tat".

    As far as chapter length goes, don't worry about it. You're the author and only you know the proper place to begin or end a chapter. Just do what feels right, that's what I do.

    Please update whenever you can as I'm really enjoying this!
Title: Chapter 3 17 Aug 2008 5:00 am
Reviewer: Keats (Signed) [Report This]
    Sev is going to need to have a lot of patients and love... he is doing well so far but he is going to have to move slowly and carefully and remember that he is going to make mistakes like using the phrase 'not bad' but he just has to learn and not give up hope his task is a herculean one and there are many obstacles. There are going to be times when he has to be firm but there also would be times when he is going to have to be a teddy bear

    Author's Response: Yeah, I like the bit about the word Bad because it shows that Harry has a grasp of language- words having meanings- at least in a primial sense (versus, like, dogs who mostly rely on voice tone. Harry doesnt)
Title: Chapter 3 16 Aug 2008 4:23 pm
Reviewer: Mysterious Jedi (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Interesting start. I look forward to seeing more. Poor Harry!
Title: Chapter 3 16 Aug 2008 10:17 am
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    “I’m not the guy to deal with crying.”
    "Guy" is an Americanism...'bloke' would be better.

    Otherwise, an interesting story.
Title: Chapter 3 16 Aug 2008 9:46 am
Reviewer: KimSpiritTalks (Signed) [Report This]
    Very interesting story. I like Snape in this. I like the way he thinks to himself, it's very realistic. Looking forward to more!
Title: Chapter 3 16 Aug 2008 9:28 am
Reviewer: mithrilandtj (Signed) [Report This]
    Poor Harry.
    I hope he starts comng out of his shell soon.

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