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Reviews For Lost Boy
This was my favorite line: "Then again, he thought with a smirk, most of the dunderheads he taught didn’t understand what he was saying to them. At least Harry had an excuse not to."--Lol, good one! -P.G.
I do have to criticize a few things that Harry has done in this chapter though. I am personally surprised that Harry would know that the ball was a toy. It is my assumption that Harry has not left his cage and it became obvious that Dudley didn't know about Harry, so how would Harry know what the ball was if he had never seen anyone play with one? This same question goes for him drinking out of the vile--has Harry drank out of a cup before, or has Petunia given him water in a bowl like an animal? Would he know what to do with it if it was in a vile? Do you see what I mean? I'm not trying to be mean or rude with this review, but I just think that more thought needs to go into some of these scenarios (and maybe it does in further chapters, I'll have to see). But I mean, if Harry's never been out of his cage, would he really know how to walk? Would his legs be strong enough to hold him up? I just really think these things need to be taken into consideration. On the plus side, I do like how patient Sev is being with Harry and how he's using every trick in his teaching book to try and get Harry to do what he needs him to do. I think there is some hope for him yet. -P.G.
My one criticism is that I don't think Severus was shocked enough when he saw Harry for the first time. Something like this is not an everyday case of abuse and I think Sev would have been a lot more shocked than you portrayed him. Other than that, I like where this is going. It's a very good read. -P.G.
-P.G.
~Frosty
I hope he heals his arm quick though--there's nothing so bad as far as infection goes as a human bite.
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