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Reviews For Severus's Reluctant Brother
I was rather upset that Albus didn't do something more to the Marauders for destroying Severus's potions book, that was like the ultimate in cruelty, like if someone went to my house and burned down my personal library. I'd be going nuts and ready to kill. One thing did puzzle me. The second to the last line, is a wizard unlocking Tobias's front door, or did you mean Tobias is a wizard? Because I've always thought of him as a Muggle, though if you wanted to make him a wizard in your story, that's cool.
The Dumbledore bit has me confused. The way it was written, he would have had no opportunity to perform Legilimency, and to get everything from Harry even that would have required time. He seems to know everything from the future, which I am unsure how to logically explain - believability is very important in a story, and this bugs me a bit. I am sure you have an explanation but I would have liked it to be included, not this rush of - oh Harry - bam, adoption. Way, way too fast. Also agreeing to adopt someone based on a little letter, with almost zero explanations is not too realistic. A note where Dumbles asks of Tobias to allow an abused child to spend the summer in their home, in hopes of getting better is much more sound. An adoption coming out of that situation is realistic. Tobias' actions also were more than a tad hasty. Adopt a child who disagrees by the way, and then assume an attitude problem out of the blue after five seconds of interaction is not good parenting, far, far from it. Anyway, the story has potential indeed, I'd love to keep on reading it, but the realism factor is important to me, and for now I am finding myself having to suspend disbelief which is not something I tend to do for a long time. Just take your time, work with the characters, let the story evolve slowly into what you want it to be.
Author's Response: And who said he isn't going to get eveen with them? They have tormented his son for seven years. So just wait and see ^_^
I like that Tobias is not the monster he is usually made out to be and I like that he obviously loves his son. I also like that McG and Dumbledore do try to handle the "brats - Potter, Black, Pettigrew and Lupin" I am looking forward to more.
Again nice job, this is very creative. Nightshade :)
I do think that was handled rather badly by Tobias (well, by both, but we don't know what Dumbledore is up to yet). Adopting the poor kid completely against his will and then hitting him when he protests? What kind of a way is *that* to deal with an abused child? Geez, Tobias. And personally, when one is being essentially kidnapped, I think a little "attitude" is reasonable... However, these complaints aside, it *is* a very interesting idea—what with the time travel and all—and I look forward to seeing how you handle it!
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