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Reviews For Father of Mine
Author's Response: well, he sure doesn't want Harry. Which is really pretty rotten, but that's Snape (for now, at least). Glad you like it, and thanks for the review.
A tip from me would be to get a beta. You seem to be a very good writer, but there are a few mistakes here and there that a beta would catch, making this nearly perfect. Also, I'd question whether or not Snape would really bang his head on the desk. I don't think he would, though it did make me smile when it happened because it was so unexpected. I can tell this is going to be a great story! -P.G. Author's Response: Glad you like it! I've thought about a beta, but truthfully, I don't have the faintest idea how to go about finding one. You are, however, completely correct ... there are always (at least) a few mistakes in each chapter. It's maddening to look back and find them, but they're definitely there. If you happen to know anyone who's available, and who might like to work on this story, would you mind letting me know? It would be a huge benefit to have a second set of eyes prior to posting. Thanks very much for the review...hope you continue to read and enjoy it.
Author's Response: lol, I never thought of the lemon drop thing... but you're totally correct. Glad you think it's interesting. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I don't do a lot of writing (this is my first effort at a fanfic), so it's encouraging to hear your thoughts. I appreciate the review!
Author's Response: Thanks. Albus' descriptions are meant to be that way... sort of like reading one of the tabloid horoscope. "You're generous, but selfish..., friendly but prone to bouts of seclusion..." Basically, he's telling Severus what he thinks Severus wants to hear. He plays into Severus' known dislike of Harry (immature, obstinate, etc.), adds in a little flattery (he has his father's wit and cunning), and then put's out a little hope (kind, generous, etc.) in an effort to push Severus into assuming custody. Severus will revisit this scene later in the story, and he might understand some things the second time around that weren't exactly clear to him the first time around. And I agree, Harry had a pretty good attitude, all things considered. But Severus (and this is Severus' view we see here, not my personal view) doesn't see it that way, and Dumbledore isn't afraid to use those negative emotions to get on Severus' better side ("yes, Severus... we know it's all Harry's fault... not yours... and since I understand you so well, how about doing me this one little favor??"). Does that make sense? I rambling...I need to go to bed now. But before I do, I have to say - you're stories are wonderful. I haven't been doing much reading lately b/c I've been writing, but I'm going to make a point to catch up on them and a few others. Thanks for the review. :)
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Author's Response: Thanks. Glad you like it. :)
If he is as self destructive as DD seems to think, I can imagine that these revelations will definitely push him over the edge. Still, interested enough to continue. You write very well. wrappedinharry Author's Response: Harry may change, but I can't really say right now. And as for Dumbledore in this fic, well... it's best not to take everything he says at face value. He doesn't lie, exactly, but he will have the tendency to tell people what he thinks they want and/or need to hear. Thanks for the compliment on the writing.
Author's Response: Thanks! Writing is always great fun. :) |
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