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Reviews For Father of Mine
Title: Chapter 1 06 Sep 2008 3:29 am
Reviewer: dracosgoddess123 (Signed) [Report This]
    pretty good first chapter. cant say much else as i will need to read a few more chapters before i can really get into it but it looks promising

    Author's Response:

    Thanks!  Second chapter up.  Will post Chapter three sometime next weekend.

Title: Chapter 1 04 Sep 2008 7:32 am
Reviewer: Rhea (Signed) [Report This]
    Well, I donk like Severus in this chapter very much. If not at all. Not because you described him badly - no!, but because of his attitude towards Harry. He knew all along that Harry was his son - and he doesn't care a bit about him! This just can't be! He doesn't want any kind of relationship with Harry, not because the boy's safety can suffer, but because it's just that: he doesn't want it. I'm sad because of it.....
    And, how did it happen, that Snape became a father of the Boy-Who-Lived?

    Author's Response: lol, he is a bit if a jerk right now, isn't he?  Chapter three will elaborate a bit more on the background...  Thanks for the review!
Title: Chapter 1 03 Sep 2008 7:11 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Hi, I've already reviewed, but I am responding to your response concerning your response about CP in your story. I, as well, hope you don't take that route. You did mention that Snape might strike out in anger. I really hope by that you just mean maybe a slap in the face or something (not that that is acceptable behaviour by any means), but nothing more agressive.

    I COULD see canon Snape slapping Harry for what he sees as disrepect or insolence. Please don't go beyond that.

    Can't wait for the next update!
Title: Chapter 1 03 Sep 2008 4:39 pm
Reviewer: dragonero (Signed) [Report This]
    Great start!!! I hope you will continue soon!!!

    Author's Response: Thanks!
Title: Chapter 1 02 Sep 2008 7:16 am
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Unusual start; usually it's Harry at the start plus the means he discovers the truth. Snape's utter reluctance is IC, but why he is nasty to Harry if he knows James is not his father? Just curious.

    Author's Response:

    I was trying to find an unusual angle for this Sevitus, so maybe I've succeeded!  lol, we'll see... 

    It is hard to understand why Snape would be so bitter.  Actually, another reviewed had the same question (my response to that questio is below), but basically, Snape considers Harry to be James' son and biology be damned.  It will hopefully be more understandable as more of the history unfolds.

    Thanks for the review.

Title: Chapter 1 02 Sep 2008 4:37 am
Reviewer: Zarathustra (Signed) [Report This]
    Excellent beginning.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks!  Glad to hear you like it. 

Title: Chapter 1 01 Sep 2008 11:06 pm
Reviewer: Morgansnape87 (Signed) [Report This]
    really good story so far. I like the ideas and thought behind it all. Keep it up

    Author's Response: Thanks very much.  The idea has been in my head for some time.  And while it's a bit daunting to put those ideas out there for others to read, it's also fun.  I hope you continue to enjoy it. :-)
Title: Chapter 1 01 Sep 2008 10:37 pm
Reviewer: melrose666 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Great start to the story--it will be interesting to see the direction this will go. Looking forward to the next chapter.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks very much.  Will hopefully have another update around the weekend or so!

Title: Chapter 1 01 Sep 2008 9:57 pm
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    Nicely done for a first fanfiction. I like the way you portrayed Severus. He isn't looking forward to this but will do his duty.I think that "duty" will drive him crazy, annoy him but end up being wonderful for both.

    I liked the way he hit his head on the table - it was funny and sad.

    Dumbledore has much to answer for. From his conversation, it is apparent that he was willing blind to Harry's "home life."

    I don't blame the Dursleys. I don't like them, but leaving Harry with them put them (and their child) in terrible danger. Since Harry found out he is a wizard, Dudley has had a tail stuck on him, Vernon lost a valuable client, Aunt Marge (rotten woman) was nearly killed, Dudley had his tongue enlarged (he could have died) and Dudley nearly had his soul removed by the Dementors. Vernon probably said - enough!!

    I am really looking forward to more.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks!  That part with Severus was a last minute add in, but I like it because it shows that he is human, and that the situation is hard on him, too.  As for the Dursleys, you're right  The news of Voldemort's official return, on top of everything else, was simply too much for them to take.  Dursleys exit stage right.  And you're right on Dumbledore, too.  He wanted Harry to have the physical protections of Privet drive, and so he chose remain blind to the problems that existed.  Any emotional or mental pain Harry may have suffered at the hands of the Dursleys is collateral (albeit unfortunate) damage.  Poor Harry.  I'm going to put him through the ringer ... (queue evil laugh soundtrack...)

     

Title: Chapter 1 01 Sep 2008 9:11 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Great start to your story. I like that Harry is a little younger than most of the stories out there. It gives a little more time for him to bond to Severus before he comes of age.

    I feel bad for Harry though that the only reason Snape is taking him in is out of necessity; if he resents Harry and is not willing to form a father/son relationship, I can see alot of headbutting between the two of them. They are both so stubborn.

    Hope you update soon, I can't wait to see Harry's reaction to the news of who is dear daddy is!!!

    I sincerely hope that you will continue with this story and not abandon it just as I am getting into it. Alot of authors lately have started really great stories with alot of potential and then fail to continue with them. It is so disappointing.

    Author's Response:

    Glad to hear you're enjoying it.  I like Harry a little younger, too.  Actually, I thought about beginning the story after GoF, but I needed Sirius out of the way (poor Sirius, I really do like him, even though I want him dead).  The Ministry events took care of that little problem and, as a bonus, gave me a good source of guilt to bury Harry under.  lol... well, maybe not bury, but you know what I mean.  At any rate, I think a younger Harry is better for this story.  He's a pretty forgiving person, but his life has been orchestrated by people who are somewhat indifferent to the effects of their choices.  Learning to forgive won't be quick.  Or painless, for that matter.

    I'm hoping to post once every week or so, but that might have to be a bit flexible.  I have small children, gainful employment, and a hubby who can't fathom why I like Harry Potter.  So, I have to take those elements into consideration also.  That said, I know what you mean about abandoned stories.  It drives me nuts when an author pulls you into their vision and then just drops out of sight.  I'll make every effort to refrain from being one of those authors.  :)


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