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Title: Chapter 5 23 Apr 2009 5:39 pm
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    I love how Harry tried to turn back several times, lol. He's acting very realistically about the new situation. I guess Snape's on edge because they've never been 100 percent sure that Harry was his, correct? I hope he is, even though that is what Harry wants the least.

    -P.G.

    Author's Response: Glad to hear it's believable!  Snape knows that Harry is his, but he's on edge because 1.) it's been a crappy week for him; and 2.) he's worried that the Minister might somehow get custody of Harry, notwithstanding the fact that Harry is his son.  Snape doesn't want custody of Harry, but he really, really doesn't want Fudge to have him.  It would be disastrous.
Title: Chapter 1 23 Apr 2009 5:29 pm
Reviewer: RhiannanT (Signed) [Report This]
    Very nice so far. I like how in this one, Snape openly acknowledges (at least to Dumbledore) that he is Harry's father, but that that doesn't prevent him from disliking the kid. I can't imagine caonon Snape ever wanting a child.

    Author's Response:

    well, he sure doesn't want Harry.  Which is really pretty rotten, but that's Snape (for now, at least).  Glad you like it, and thanks for the review.

Title: Chapter 9 23 Apr 2009 2:58 pm
Reviewer: gin (Anonymous) [Report This]
    lily isnt harry' mother.im really sorry for harry.its Christmas and snape not with him.poor boy.he thinks snape hate him because for mother' died.when snape open his eyes and saw his real son.
    please update soon.

    Author's Response:

    hmm... Rita Skeeter thinks that Harry is Snape's original son, which would mean that Lily wasn't his mother.  But we know that Rita's not always concerned with getting her facts straight.  But then again, she does sometimes get it right.  As the saying goes, "Even a blind squirrel gets a nut now and then."  We'll see in a few chapters... :)  Thanks you for reviewing!!

Title: Chapter 4 23 Apr 2009 10:54 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Creepy Death Eater voice? Yikes! Way too freak out your newly calm son, Severus. I enjoyed the Soothing Charm of this chapter and will expect to see it again sometime soon? Perhaps those could take the place of all the sleeping draughts Poppy won't let Harry have. One note on that: you spelled draughts incorrectly in this chapter; make sure you use the "a" version, because "droughts" are not the same thing.

    Very interesting fic--I'm still very curious about Severus' family.

    -P.G.

    Author's Response:

    lol - see that?  case made for the beta reader!!  Thanks for pointing it out - I'll try and tidy it up with the next update.  I like the soothing charm, too... it seems like it might provide a mechanism to get the two characters more connected, so I expect it will be around in future chapters.  Thanks for reviewing!

Title: Chapter 3 23 Apr 2009 10:38 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Oooh, very secretive. I'm very curious about the first memory, which seems to portray Severus as a husband and a father to another child. Are they still living? Why did Severus show him that particular memoir?

    I kind of feel Harry's pain after what he saw. I can't believe they'd test something so uncertain on him, as an unborn baby, no less.

    Anyway, the poor boy is about to have a reality check when he finds out his worst nightmare is coming to life! This is very well-written and detailed; I'm enjoying every word!

    -P.G.

    Author's Response:

    lol... can't reveal too much now, can I??  Answers are on the way, I promise...   And yes, Harry's not pleased to see how casual others have been about manipulating his life.  He's in a bit of a hard spot, though, because those people - Dumbledore, his parents (meaning, loosely, Lily and James), and to a small degree, maybe even Snape - are the same people that he has previously loved, trusted and/or relied upon to some extent.  Talk about being conflicted.  Thanks for the review!

Title: Chapter 2 23 Apr 2009 10:21 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, I do like this very much. Another great Snapey line is "It was an oddly human gesture." I love these Snape quotes; they are somewhat cliche, but they are much better than having Snape be much to nice and out of character. I also really enjoyed Harry's laughing fit when Snape tells him about his parentage. The "Star Wars" quote worked quite nicely too.

    Very delightful!

    -P.G.

    Author's Response: Thank you.  It's much more fun to write when you know others are enjoying it, too.  :)
Title: Chapter 1 23 Apr 2009 10:02 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, this is very interesting and well-written too. I think my favorite line was: "Severus had no idea if Hagrid needed to fly his hideous creatures or not"--lol, it just sounds like a very 'Snapey' thing to say.

    A tip from me would be to get a beta. You seem to be a very good writer, but there are a few mistakes here and there that a beta would catch, making this nearly perfect. Also, I'd question whether or not Snape would really bang his head on the desk. I don't think he would, though it did make me smile when it happened because it was so unexpected.

    I can tell this is going to be a great story!

    -P.G.

    Author's Response: Glad you like it!  I've thought about a beta, but truthfully, I don't have the faintest idea how to go about finding one.  You are, however, completely correct ... there are always (at least) a few mistakes in each chapter.  It's maddening to look back and find them, but they're definitely there.  If you happen to know anyone who's available, and who might like to work on this story, would you mind letting me know?  It would be a huge benefit to have a second set of eyes prior to posting.  Thanks very much for the review...hope you continue to read and enjoy it.
Title: Chapter 9 23 Apr 2009 5:32 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    I was so happy to see that you've updated, and I really loved this chapter, especially the ending. I'm very curious now. If Harry IS the lost son, then does that mean that Lily is not his mother! :o

    Oh, please update soon. I'm really anxious to see what happens when Snape comes back.

    Author's Response: well... it could mean that Lily's not his mother, but the first question that needs answered is whether Harry is Snape's original son.  And we won't know that for a few chapters... argh, but I really, really want to get to that chapter b/c I think it will be fun to write.  We just have to get through the preliminary stuff... :)  Thanks for your thoughts and (as always) for taking the time to review!
Title: Chapter 8 07 Apr 2009 8:23 pm
Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) [Report This]
    Just found your story and have been crying my eyes out. You're good.

    Looking forward to your next chapter.
    V

    Author's Response:

    Thank you!  Next chapter is almost done - will hopefully be out by the weekend.  :)

Title: Chapter 8 07 Apr 2009 2:45 am
Reviewer: Rosa (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Really nice story. I like your Snape. Can't wait to see what happened with his wife and child. Thanks!

    Author's Response: Snape is fun to write, so it's good to hear that you like him.  Thanks very much for the review!

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