Potions and Snitches
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Title: Chapter 2 03 Feb 2022 2:20 am
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    Really enjoying this so far!
Title: Chapter 2 04 Dec 2010 10:39 pm
Reviewer: MoiraRClip (Signed) [Report This]
    This is really good so far! I'm definitely enjoying it!
Title: Chapter 2 26 Jan 2009 7:02 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Poor Harry!

    Author's Response: Poor, poor, poor, poor, POOR Harry. I don't envy him one little bit! Thanks for the review!
Title: Chapter 2 25 Jan 2009 4:02 pm
Reviewer: writeurlife (Signed) [Report This]
    I really like this chapter; however, if I were you I'd take out the sentence that says "It had surprised him that Potter had even bothered to say goodnight but it surprised him even more that he had replied"... Here's why: even when writing in third person, the narrative concentrates on the thoughts of one person. Sometimes it might change for a chapter or two, but never for just a sentence. If you'll notice in the real Harry Potter, for example, we never got to see what was going through the Dursley's brains (except for the first chapter of the first book, and then it was only Vernon) and we never saw what was going through the Weasley's brains... In this chapter you established the fact that you're letting on to Harry's thoughts, so adding in what Snape was thinking is a little confusing and just doesn't come across correctly. Additionally, the fact that you said Snape's goodbye was more of a reflex than anything makes that sentence unnecessary anyway- readers can sense it from reading between the lines.

    Author's Response: Thanks for the helpful review! It really helps me when readers give me advice, the whole reason I am writing (other than the fact that I love doing it) is to improve so I love a bit of constructive critisism. I understand what you mean about the POV change and I will try and stop doing it in future chapters, I'll revise the current chapters when I have some spare time as well. Thanks again, I appreciate it!
Title: Chapter 2 30 Sep 2008 5:43 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh boy, looks like the sparks are already flying. Does Snape really expect Harry to remember all those rules in one day?

    Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! Wow, its quite an honour to get a review of you. You are on the featured list all the time, your stories must be incredible. I really must check them out. I'm soooo glad you liked my fic! I don't know about Harry but I would never be able to remember all of those rules. Or.... I would remember them but then 'accidently' break them. Anyway, thanks again for such a nice review!
Title: Chapter 2 28 Sep 2008 8:12 pm
Reviewer: ObsessiveaboutSnape (Signed) [Report This]
    Awww...that was nice...in a Snape-is-a-mean-git kind of way. Hope you continue soon. I'll be waiting!!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you liked it! Next chapter will be up asap. It may even be up tonight actually, I have to get a chapter written for another of my fics first though...

    Thanks again for the feedback!

Title: Chapter 2 13 Sep 2008 10:27 pm
Reviewer: Sasulia (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow, fantastic beginning to a promising story. I find this very interesting, well written, and full of good ideas. Very much looking forward to more. Definately a 10.

    Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! You made me blush! I'm really glad you liked it and thought it was promising! The lovely things you said will stay with me forever. I really appreciate the rating too, I have just updated and I hope you like that chapter as much. Thanks again, I really do appreciate it.
Title: Chapter 2 13 Sep 2008 11:26 am
Reviewer: Muggle49 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Interesting beginning, seems to be simmering up to a full boil (smile) Thanks for sharing

    Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you liked it! LOL, its boiling just like polyjuice potion! I have just updated and I hope you like the next chapter too. Thanks again!
Title: Chapter 2 11 Sep 2008 7:47 am
Reviewer: IT (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I LIKE IT
    UPDATE IT
    THANKS
    IT

    Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! LOL, I love how clever your review was IT! Hehe! Hilarious! I'm so glad you liked it! I have just updated and I hope you like this chapter as much. Thanks again for making me smile with your kind words.
Title: Chapter 2 09 Sep 2008 5:38 pm
Reviewer: Marion (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Well, what do you know, Harry-me-boy, if you behave civilised, people will treat you like a civilised being in return. Who would've guessed! *sarcasm*
    Being civilised includes: coming on time for appointments, be grateful that somebody will put up with you for the whole summer even when he has no obligation or wish to do so, be grateful that you actually have a room to sleep in instead of a cupboard, not complaining about the colourscheme or the taste in decoration of your host, not complaining about your host at all, displaying basic tablemanners, not giving cheek, rude answers or insolent looks but instead be polite (a foreign concept to some, I know)

    I know, Harry-me-boy, that you've been raised in a figurative barn, and that you can't really be blamed for braying like a donkey, but I'm just warning you that if you are rude, surly, insolent and whiny about such idiotic things as colourschemes, you will sound like a spoilt, arrogant twerp. If you sound like an spoilt, arrogant twerp, you will be treated as a spoilt, arrogant twerp. No use then getting angry for your host to think you spoilt and arrogant. If you want to be treated and thought of as a nice, civil boy, oh, I dunno, ACT LIKE ONE!!!

    (and yes, that goes for the 'first potions lesson as well'. Read that chapter again and you'll see that the whole of the class is listening intently to teacher Snape's speech about 'bottling fame'etc, except for twerp Harry and sidekick twerp Ron Weasley who "raised their eyebrows at each other". In other words, when the teacher is speaking, these two boys pull 'who's this idiot' faces at each other. No wonder the teacher comes down at him like a ton of bricks. I would.)

    This rant has been brought to you by Marion, who is constantly annoyed by Potter fan's insistance that nasty-bad Snape is 'constantly picking' at poor widdle Harrikins who never did anything to deserve it, oh no, and who somehow think that Harry being rude, disobedient and dishonest is perfectly okay because he's 'just a chiiiild' but that Snape has to apologise or even admit to 'being so wrong about Harry being spoilt and arrogant' because 'he's the adult, he should know better'. Argh!

    Sorry, this rant was not aimed at you, dear author. Harry Potter just has this effect on me. I loved how Harry had the epiphany that displaying good manners gets a civilised response at the end of this chapter. By just letting the boy realise this, you have deserved a ten star rating. Hurrah!

    Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I really appreciate the rating (hurrah!) and your words of wisdom. What you are saying is completely true, Harry just has to realise it. Over the next few chapters he will realise it more and more. Of course he will stay have points were he will be disobedient and rude because if he didnt, lets face it, he wouldnt be Harry. Thanks again for the feedback, I really appreciate it.

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