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Reviews For Dobby's Brilliant Idea
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm really glad you like it, and I hope you'll like the rest of the chapters. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I'm not entirely sure whats happening with chapter 3. I uploaded it 12 hours ago.. but I think it hasn't been validated (or something like that). I'm assuming thats why the chapter looks blank - you aren't allowed to read it yet ;). Hopefully it will be up soon.
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! :) I hope you like the rest of it! More will be coming soon.
Author's Response: Severus and apothecaries just seem to go well together. :) No way I would put Lily and James together! yuk! I'm a Sev/Lily shipper all the way! but they are 12 at the moment, so you will have to wait until they are a bit older. I consider myself an expert on 12 year old behaviour - my little sister is 12, and imho the only 12 yr olds 'dating' are doing it because it's cool and 'grown up', not because they really have any romantic feelings for one another. Ah, the black eye... well. I've already mentioned that I'm deviating from cannon in more than one way (just cos I felt like it). Snape has been my fav character for ages, so I already had invented a childhood for him before the later books came out. I'll just say that it couldn't have been the marauders (the black eye was already there by the time he saw them), and it wasn't his father.... Sev doesn't even know who he is.
Author's Response: Thank you! I really love getting feedback (especially the positive sort)! :)
Anyway, interesting start! :) I'll be curious to see how this story pans out. A suggestion, though—Harry's emotions seem a little lacking, especially considering the circumstances. I imagine it would be rather difficult (lots of conflicted emotion) seeing your parents for the first time, no matter what they were like. Perhaps you could try showing what he is feeling a little more? I think Snape working at an apothecary makes perfect sense! Author's Response: Thank you for your review! Yup- the Marauders are a bit evil. I am too much of a Snape fan to have ever liked them. I don't mind Lupin though, he is just a bit spineless. I think in cannon the Marauders are awful too, I mean Sirius did try to kill Snape... and although there weren't too many examples that we actually see in cannon, the other one we do see is the mudblood incident in 'Snape's Worst Memory'. Imho its not the bullying that makes it the worst memory - that is pretty standard - it is just because Lily now hates him. I'm curious to how the story will pan out too... (not a good sign, huh.) *runs off to brainstorm* You are very right about the emotions lacking - thanks for your feedback. I was thinking the same thing as I read over it. I should go back and add some more in... Yeah, Snape working at an apothecary makes more sense to me than cannon!
Author's Response: Yup. Though I expect it will just look like a regular scar. I doubt anyone will recognise it as a curse scar (though maybe dumbledore... thats a thought :) ).
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you like it! I do plan to continue (and soon), but I'm not entirely sure of where it's going... *runs off to brainstorm* |
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