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Reviews For Dobby's Brilliant Idea
Anyway, interesting start! :) I'll be curious to see how this story pans out. A suggestion, though—Harry's emotions seem a little lacking, especially considering the circumstances. I imagine it would be rather difficult (lots of conflicted emotion) seeing your parents for the first time, no matter what they were like. Perhaps you could try showing what he is feeling a little more? I think Snape working at an apothecary makes perfect sense! Author's Response: Thank you for your review! Yup- the Marauders are a bit evil. I am too much of a Snape fan to have ever liked them. I don't mind Lupin though, he is just a bit spineless. I think in cannon the Marauders are awful too, I mean Sirius did try to kill Snape... and although there weren't too many examples that we actually see in cannon, the other one we do see is the mudblood incident in 'Snape's Worst Memory'. Imho its not the bullying that makes it the worst memory - that is pretty standard - it is just because Lily now hates him. I'm curious to how the story will pan out too... (not a good sign, huh.) *runs off to brainstorm* You are very right about the emotions lacking - thanks for your feedback. I was thinking the same thing as I read over it. I should go back and add some more in... Yeah, Snape working at an apothecary makes more sense to me than cannon!
Author's Response: Yup. Though I expect it will just look like a regular scar. I doubt anyone will recognise it as a curse scar (though maybe dumbledore... thats a thought :) ).
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you like it! I do plan to continue (and soon), but I'm not entirely sure of where it's going... *runs off to brainstorm*
Author's Response: Glad you like it! I'm not entirely sure where the story is going, but I have bits and pieces planned out. The next chapter should be up this week I think, and hopefully the plot will solidify as I go :). As to the legality of child labour... well, I think that any apothecary that employs a child would have to be a bit suss. In my mind the wizarding world does have child labour laws, but the apothecary is in knockturn alley, and Severus isn't on the books. I suppose that means they don't have to pay him the minimum wage too (it's not like he can complain to the unions or get a new job). *Smirks* More on that later ;) |
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