Your story is a bunch of oxymoron. (Two words that are complete opposite of each other, like dark sun)
Stupid Hermione
Loving Snape
Mature Ron
Tolerable Fudge
Unhinged Draco
Broken Ginny
Etc. Etc. Etc.
poor molly under the wrath of the poppy!!
| Title: Chapter 18
| 29 Jun 2010 5:00 am
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| Reviewer: malimed (Anonymous)
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interesting story, handled in a unique way. like the characterization. sev as fudge's brother is definitely new. you have a LOT of plot strands going, and i'm intruiged to see where they all lead and why.
my only issue is that you either need a beta or you need to proofread more closely. you have a lot of missed letters that should be caught by a basic spellchecker. (tat instead of that, or replacing "e" with "w" or "r") it's frustrating to see mistakes like that in such a good story. it really disrupts the flow of things.
otherwise, great job!
Right now I can't help but shake my head at Hermione's idiocy. She's usually so smart but cannot see that her automatic assumptions are only making her look like a fool. Yes, it's true that Harry and Severus found themselves becoming close quickly but that is mostly because of the sharing of their memories. Of course, she doesn't know that but that is mainly because she isn't willing to listen to the truth preferring instead to come to her own rather biased opinions. If she keeps saying such awful things, she is only going to find herself friendless, alone, and despised.
I can understand the why of Molly's railing against that awful woman's wards, but am horrified that she allowed herself to completely drain her core. Doesn't she realize that Ginny would never want her to risk herself like that? I do hope that Poppy will be able to help her.
I'm really curious about that Gnome and what significance it's presence in the Weasley home has....
Great chapter!
| Title: Chapter 18
| 27 Jan 2010 6:34 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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I loved Severus' way of dealing with Molly and Hermione needs telling off but I don't like her and Harry to be at outs as they always stick together in the books so let them make up
Thanks for updating
No, I don't think that Sev was too hard on HErmione. SHe needs to get her facts straight before accusing people of things.
I liked how Sev took Molly to Hogwarts but the sole gnome in the hallway has me worried. Will the Burrow be standing when Molly gets back or in any shape to live in?
An excellent chapter.
Ooh, I like you're HP world a lot! Fudge isn't a useless waste, Snape is shown to have a heart for more than one or two people, and Hermione, though her usual brilliant self, isn't the perfect little know-it-all most people try to portray her as. Was he a little hard onher? Yes, but in the context of all he's been through the last few days and is having to deal with all these gooey feel good emotions all of a sudden, I think we can forgive him for it. I can't wait to see what's coming next, keep it up, this fic is excellent!
Karen
| Title: Chapter 18
| 24 Jan 2010 8:48 am
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| Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous)
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No, Sev was not to hard on Hermione, she shouldn't accuse. I love the way sev took chaarge of molly. Great chapterr.
No, I don't think that he was too hard on her, although he probably didn't help her image of him any :) Good chappie, can't wait for more! But then, you know I love your work.
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