This was a great chapter, but I think I'll dwell on the "you can't die with unused ice cream coupons" fact of the day. I'm sure you'll understand why. Umm, there was a big reason I didn't comment after Sev thought Harry died. You wrote the chapter too well.
Sing a song of sixpence,
A pocket full of rye.
Four and twenty blackbirds,
Baked in a pie.
The 'Puffs prolly wouldn't get a reference like that, would they? I think it's cute though. I had to look up exactly how many black birds were in the pies, but you are very clever.
| Title: Chapter 7
| 30 Mar 2010 8:55 pm
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| Reviewer: Carol (Anonymous)
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Ugh...no matter how many times I read this story, this chapter especially, I break down into tears. It tears my heart. Love it.
That was priceless! Pure priceless. You need to read Snapegirl's Broken Wings, she was a very good way of dismissing Um-bitch as well. I always like McG, but I'm liking her here even better. Oh and I forgot to comment last chapter, when you gave Harry the water and scrubbrushes I had a memory flash of Disney's The Sword in the Stone where Merlin magics the dishes clean, but ice scating? that's fun!
Albus' last line really tickled me.
All of Harry's problems of his other life will be fixed by Christmas at this rate. Very nice. the Pettigoo was a nice touch by the way. And if AD is the Artful Dodger, what shall we call Severus Snape?
You write extremely well. I could picture all of Snape's actions. And the part where hi pinched the bridge of his nose and said "You called him Lord Voldauvent, didn't you?" I actually pinched the bridge of my nose in mimicry you wrote it so well. Thankfully no one is here...
I'm starting to really like your Percy. Very good story.
I loved your Hermione! I'm going to say she's a bit OOC just because she wasn't that awesome in JKR's books, especially as a first year. And I have a new favorite background character. Did we meet the Slyth prefects in cannon? Love Love Love
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