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Reviews For Sectumsempra - The Consequences
One thing you might look at: 32 lines up from the bottom, the sentence beginning "Determined to show Snape he could do it..." should end a little differently. The word "not" should be deleted, so it reads "...Harry closed his eyes in order to ward off all distractions." Otherwise, he doesn't want to ward off the distractions, and logically, that's the opposite of what I think you're after. Just a slip, I'm sure. Keep on having Snape and Harry learning to appreciate the other's perspective (as best as they can!)--and Happy New Year! May 2009 be a good year for all of us! Author's Response: Thanks for your feedback! And thanks for pointing out the mistake - I fixed it!
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, I really hope I'll make it to the end without making anybody OOC....
I like this story and think that its definately well written. I also like how you write it from both views, I cant wait to see what Snape was thinking when he agreed to heal Harry even after being disrespectful. I cant imagine why he would do that, without even so much as telling him off, but yes, I guess I will find out soon enough... Keep updating. This is a good story :) Author's Response: Thanks for your review, glad you liked it. It's good to read that you are curious about Snape's view, and yes, I'll update the other story tonight!
Great as usual! I'm curious to see it from Snape's perspective. Author's Response: Well, mine definitely wouldn't stay green, not with Snape in the same room... Thanks for your feedback! |
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