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Reviews For Sectumsempra - The Consequences
I have a feeling Snape wasn't about to say Mudblood but perhaps something like Muggle-born. If this is the case, Harry will probably be in even bigger trouble! You've really got me wondering what's going to happen next and I'll be patiently waiting for the next chapter hehe Author's Response: Thanks for leaving your feed-back, I'm glad you liked the story. Well, as for your feeling I am going to update Snape's perspective next, then you'll find out...
Can't wait for the next chapter! Author's Response: I liked the image of you clutching your mouse, thanks!
But still, I agree with Harry's way of thinking, it was the truth and Snape had no right to call his friend a "mudblood". He was deliberately winding him up...again. I hope Hermione helps Harry soon and Im guessing that now Dumbledore steps into the picture for Harry's outburst? Oh and I have to say, if I havent already, that you write both characters very well! And just in general you're a VERY good writer. I enjoy reading your style...if that makes sense to you...
One thing you might look at: 32 lines up from the bottom, the sentence beginning "Determined to show Snape he could do it..." should end a little differently. The word "not" should be deleted, so it reads "...Harry closed his eyes in order to ward off all distractions." Otherwise, he doesn't want to ward off the distractions, and logically, that's the opposite of what I think you're after. Just a slip, I'm sure. Keep on having Snape and Harry learning to appreciate the other's perspective (as best as they can!)--and Happy New Year! May 2009 be a good year for all of us! Author's Response: Thanks for your feedback! And thanks for pointing out the mistake - I fixed it!
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, I really hope I'll make it to the end without making anybody OOC....
I like this story and think that its definately well written. I also like how you write it from both views, I cant wait to see what Snape was thinking when he agreed to heal Harry even after being disrespectful. I cant imagine why he would do that, without even so much as telling him off, but yes, I guess I will find out soon enough... Keep updating. This is a good story :) Author's Response: Thanks for your review, glad you liked it. It's good to read that you are curious about Snape's view, and yes, I'll update the other story tonight!
Great as usual! I'm curious to see it from Snape's perspective. Author's Response: Well, mine definitely wouldn't stay green, not with Snape in the same room... Thanks for your feedback!
It shows how talented a writer you are that you can make us believe that Canon Harry would take a caning from Snape and accept that it was well-deserved, or even tht DD would allow it to happen in the first place! Nice work.
Even though I hate the caning part, and think that the punisment is way over the top and abusive, and I can't believe that DD would allow this to continue, you are an excellent writer, and your story is very well thought out. I really like the two perspectives as well. Author's Response: Thanks! I agree, Snape shouldn't have caned him. It would have done no harm to let Harry off, but Snape thought his reputation would suffer. In my opinion this shows above all a lack of confidence, he knows the students don't respect him for himself as they do with Dumbledore, for example.
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