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Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Title: Disneyland Daddy 16 Oct 2008 9:31 pm
Reviewer: little-sun (Signed) [Report This]
    You have Dumbledore so perfectly in character. Always manipulating, regardless to other people's feelings, never taking long to remind you your dirty history or blackmail you into submission. He perfectly fits to canon Dumbledore we knew hardly anything about until the Deathly Hallows.
    It's also a nice change to see Harry somewhat mistreated but not as horribly and blatantly mistreated as you can see in so many fanfics.
    Mila

    Author's Response: When you put it that way, Dumbledore reminds me of a few people I know! Only they're not as smart. :o) I've abused Harry enough, so this time I decided to cut him a break . . . Snape will be mean for a while, though. Thanks for reviewing!
Title: Disneyland Daddy 16 Oct 2008 8:20 am
Reviewer: Lotiolentus (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, wonderful. I am SO looking forward to more!!!

    Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing; I'm amazed at how many people like this! An update is coming soon, I promise.
Title: Disneyland Daddy 16 Oct 2008 5:36 am
Reviewer: Attackfish (Signed) [Report This]
    Very promising start. Your Dumbledore was beautifully in character, asking and then ordering.

    Author's Response: Dumbledore strikes me as one of those who's always nice as long as you do things his way. Thanks for reviewing!
Title: Disneyland Daddy 16 Oct 2008 4:29 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    I really liked this first chapter. You write very well, I can not wait for more. Hopefully I won't have to wait too long? :)

    Author's Response: Thanks for your compliments; with the awesome response this story has gotten, I'm sure an update will be coming soon!
Title: Disneyland Daddy 16 Oct 2008 3:42 am
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow, what a fantastic first chapter! I adored this; you're a terrific writer. You've written Harry very true to his characterization, especially in the presence of the Dursleys, and I appreciate that you kept the Dursleys in character as well--allowing Harry to eat at the table with him, actually considering driving him down to Arabella's... You did a great job with the entire family. Dudley's snatching up his food only when he noticed Harry was going for his bacon was spot on. Well done.

    I love that you explained so thoroughly Dumbledore's reasoning for choosing Severus as Harry's guardian. Every scene was perfectly paced and enjoyable to read.

    Snape's annoyance--his brushing off-- of Harry's hesitancy or his slight attitude makes complete sense. I can't imagine Snape having any interest in being a disciplinarian right off the bat. He expects everyone to obey him without question and that's what he's used to. He wouldn't waste his time focusing on petty issues like Harry's belongings. His "take it or leave it" attitude is very like canon!Snape.

    I found this line particularly brilliant:

    "Scrooge liked darkness because it was cheap, as are all things common; Severus Snape liked it because it was dear, hard to come by."

    Thank you for taking such care with this first installment of your story. I hope you write quickly, because I'm hooked already.

    Author's Response:
    Thanks for the long review! As much as I love writing the abused Harry - one's going up on the Pit today, in fact - so I can cuddle him, I'm the first one to admit that it's fanon, not canon. The Dursleys were neglectful and emotionally abusive, and I'm sure Vernon may have cuffed him once or twice, but that's about as far as it went. I got the bacon thing from my mother's dogs; one won't even touch her bone until the other one wants it.
    Anyone else would have wondered why Harry only had one bag of things, but you're right when you say that Snape probably couldn't care less. Dumbledore often comes across as insensitive because he wouldn't let Harry stay with someone nice like the Weasleys, but I guess being comfortable doesn't help if he's dead.
    I hope people aren't alienated by my Snape, because he's going to be mean for a while. And he'll never be fluffy, but they'll eventually get past this stage. Thanks for your comments!
Title: Disneyland Daddy 16 Oct 2008 2:18 am
Reviewer: NotEvenHere (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Good start. I don't usually love kidfics, but you are a good writer and I'll be interested to see where the story is going. I like the phrase, "the Snape man". LOL Thanks for sharing.

    Author's Response: Well, I'm glad I "converted" you to young Harry! :o) I've always liked reading about him getting out from under the Dursleys, though I prefer Sirius over Snape. Thanks for your comments!
Title: Disneyland Daddy 16 Oct 2008 1:27 am
Reviewer: Nyx the Panther (Anonymous) [Report This]
    GREAT idea!! I hope you update soon!

    Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for reviewing!
Title: Disneyland Daddy 16 Oct 2008 12:29 am
Reviewer: projectjay (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Love this story Severus is starting it off on the wrong foot from the beginning to irratate harry on purpose poor little guy.

    Author's Response: I think Snape did that a lot in canon - that is, bait Harry for the fun of it - and they're going to be at odds for a while, but they'll start getting along eventually. Thanks for reviewing!
Title: Disneyland Daddy 16 Oct 2008 12:26 am
Reviewer: Kella (Anonymous) [Report This]
    very nice story
    i absoultely love it and im not one for kidfics
    this is great
    you have a good voice through out!
    keep it up!
    and update soon!

    Author's Response: Thanks for your comments! I never thought I could write Snape as Harry's guardian, but the muse doesn't really care about my preferences. I'm glad you liked it!
Title: Disneyland Daddy 15 Oct 2008 10:11 pm
Reviewer: ReginaCaeli (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Great begining,you write very well.

    Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing; I appreciate the compliment!

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